Graduate / 'My first modern dance' - evaluating on significant experience personal essay [4]

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It was as if I resuscitated. I was struck with delight of sensing novelty and felt some inexplicable emotion gushing from deep in my heart. I was entering into a whole new world. On April 2nd, 2005, I heard the voice of modern dance for the first time.

My heart was pounding for curiosity as I took my seat. I opened my notebook and determined to write down as much information as I could get from the pieces. Although it was the first modern dance show I attended, my purpose was no more than a mere dance review assignment for introductory dance class. I wondered how many movements or patterns which I learned in the class I could pick out from the piece.

Hall was dimmed, so was my narrow attitude to stage. Soon everything shined with iridescent light and dancers' movements started saturating the stage. Rolling, twirling, prancing, and every other movement became more than kinetic satisfaction and penetrated my heart. Subtlety of music became apparent with dancers. I was mesmerized by how bodily movements bloomed from a seed of music. Quickly, the music transformed into a language of dance which converted again into a language of soul. I was hearing the voice of the dance. There was no distinction between audio, visual, and locomotive element and only a cathartic magnetism that dragged me into the center of the universe. Mundanity seemed ephemeral and all my worries faded away as my soul communicated with the dance piece. Everything resonated as unison; the dance became my soul and I was reverberating to myself. I felt I just discovered what I had possessed but never noticed of the existence.

A choreographer Mark Morris said there was no meaning in modern dance; the piece became completed by how individual felt towards it. Modern dance gives me a freedom and lets me interact with an art. It's where "I" become an element of the art. Music, dance, and I can be in consonance with each other.

Recently, I was glad to find someone who shares my belief. Cognitive scientist Alva Noe writes in his book "Out of Our Heads" that "consciousness is like dance, reenactment of basic situation that we are socially situated as dynamic being". My first modern dance piece was an extraordinary experience of an awakening, teaching me what is to be conscious. To me, dance is a perfect "active attunement to the world".