Undergraduate / UWATERLOO - HELP AIF FOR MECH ENG, MATH, CS [5]

@makineau
This is definitely much better! I still feel like there's lots of room to remove stuff though. I'm writing my AIF for Management Engineering right now and I chose to talk about the clubs and institutes Waterloo has etc, in in the question where it asks what you want to do in Waterloo Engineering. I feel like you should use this question to really show the admission officer your ambition in Mechanical Engineering and your other programs as a whole and your general interest in the school and then expanding on that in later questions

Building on my passion ... In either Math or CS, I want ...

Instead you could write: Building on my passion for space, I want to master data analysis and problem solving through either Math or CS.

Also since we're both writing our AIF's, I'd be happy to exchange info and help each other or something

Undergraduate / UWATERLOO - HELP AIF FOR MECH ENG, MATH, CS [5]

I feel like you should elaborate on why this program will help YOU, why it ties into YOUR goals and ambitions. For example, you talked about Co-op but didn't really elaborate on how or why it would help you. You're showing that you've done a lot of research about your program and Waterloo (which is great) but it's not really talking about you or your goals. Also the last sentence doesn't really make sense to me. Other than that, I think your paragraph is good, you just need to connect your points and take out some unnecessary info. Lastly, I feel like this question shouldn't really be answered on a research based way. Talk more about yourself and your goals. You can show that you've done research on the Engineering section of the AIF.

The Engineering IDEAs Clinic, the Sedra Design Centre, and its Rocketry Team are of specific interest to me; the opportunity provided by these playgrounds validates that Mechanical Engineering at Waterloo is the next step in accomplishing my goals.

This sentence is another example where you could elaborate on or even take out and talk about in the Engineering section