Writing Feedback / Spending money promoting a healthy lifestyle, or on the treatment of people who are already ill? [4]

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It is more important to spend public money promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill.

To what extent do you agree of disagree?

Some people suggest that it would be good for patients to spend the budget on treatment more than spend it on preventing from diseases. In my opinion, spreading a healthy style play a important role to improve and protect both mental and physical health.

On the one hand, there are some reasons that it is important for people to be treat by the budget when they get sick more than take advantage of it into prevention. The first reason, many income-low countries, most individuals spend their entire time on earning money to survive so that they have not found the importance of prevention. Another reason, a heathy style such as physical activities, balance diets or confortable mental heath help us prevent from both communicable and non-communicable diseases. But, They do not offer results clearly and people do not see it directly. On contrast, If a surgery is succeed, it will be recognized immediately.

On the other hand, in my opinion. The medicine industry is divided 2 branches: treatment and prevention. It is so essential for people that nothing is possible to replace. However, If a country concentrate on more the prevention, it will develop significantly. Because of according some existing reputable surveys show that expenditures providing the treatment are ten times the prevention. In addition, the prevention from diseases is at heath-related risk safer than the treatment. Due not to suffer from a surgery which is always better than it happen even if successful

In conclusion. Although, many people still want to use the budget for treatment. but, I personally support that spending public money on advertising healthy activities is always better spend it on curing.