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TheGreatFillip   
Oct 24, 2009
Undergraduate / "Choose your future" - Ohio State Admission essay [6]

"Choose life. Choose a job. Choose a career... Choose your future. Choose life," this quote from Trainspotting perfectly captures the kind of choices in life that I want the college I attend to give me the power to make. First I have to choose a college.

As I started to look into that choice, Ohio State was very noticeable to me from the start because of its prestige. It was when I chose to major in Psychology, and looked into schools with great psychology departments, that OSU really drew me in. With a degree from OSU's department of psychology, I would easily have the power to choose a career post-grad.

But a degree would mean nothing if the college wasn't right for me, so I gave OSU a more personal look. I visited Ohio State from an educational perspective during the summer. I found the professors welcoming and helpful, which is a major factor for me. I even had lunch with one, Professor Hosser, who explained a lot to me about how the school's education works. I had felt like the choice was made at the end of the day, but my second visit sealed it.

I visited a friend in September, and got a feel for the student life on campus. Being a big school worried me, but that enables Ohio State to have at wide diversity of people to meet and experiences to have. This diversity would be beneficial to me as I grow as a person. I met a wide range of students that day, from foreign exchange to transfers; I got a good taste of what the school has to offer.

So I choose Ohio State as the school that would allow me to choose life, and choose my future.

A bit of a revision.
TheGreatFillip   
Oct 21, 2009
Undergraduate / "Choose your future" - Ohio State Admission essay [6]

Hmmm I agree with you here. This is only the first draft of course, but I will surely go through again and fix clarity errors and generally refine it. When I was done I had to crop alot of stuff to fit the 300 word maximum, so some flow was lost. Any more suggestions my helpful forum members?
TheGreatFillip   
Oct 21, 2009
Undergraduate / "Choose your future" - Ohio State Admission essay [6]

Here is my most recent essay for Ohio State. General feedback would be appreciated.

Question: In 300 words or less, why do you want to go to Ohio State?

"Choose life. Choose a job. Choose a career... Choose your future. Choose life," this quote from Trainspotting it perfectly captures the kind of choices in life that I want the college I attend to give me the power to make. First I have to choose a college.

As I started to look into that choice, Ohio State stuck out from the beginning because of its prestige. It was when I chose to major in Psychology, and looked into schools with great psychology departments, that OSU really drew me in. With a degree from OSU's department of psychology, I would easily have the power to choose a career post-grad.

But a degree would mean nothing if the college wasn't right for me, so I gave OSU a more personal look. I visited Ohio State from an educational perspective and during the summer. I found the professors welcoming and helpful, which is a major factor for me. I even had lunch with one, Professor Hosser, who explained a lot to me about how the school's education works. I had felt like the choice was made at the end of the day, but my second visit sealed it.

I visited a friend in September, and got a feel for the student life on campus. Being a big school worried me, but that enables Ohio State to have at wide diversity of people to meet and experiences to have. This diversity would be beneficial to me as I grow as a person. I met a wide range of students that day, from foreign exchange to transfers; I got a good taste of what the school has to offer.

So I finally made my choice of schools. I choose Ohio State as the school that would allow me to choose life, and choose my future.
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