Shakerin
May 21, 2021
Scholarship / I was not selected and I want to know why! | Personal statement of KGSP/GKS 2021 [4]
Hey apiw, I have some suggestions for you. You have tried to cover every required topic in the essay, but I have found some mistakes that I did too last year. Firstly, the opening should be more dashing and unique. You have to use more relative points to your desired program and, most importantly, about yourself. You can mention your passion for the culture and language, but those are not enough. You have to show your abilities and strength in the essay, which are missing here. In addition, you have to share some memorable events which impacted your life and what you experienced/did encountering those memories. I mean, you have to prove yourself better.
Rather than the essay, KGSP has a unique process. The selection committee pays attention to 4 things: language proficiency, GPA, ECAs & finally, your application. So, you better pay attention to all these. You can do better. Good Luck!!!
Hey apiw, I have some suggestions for you. You have tried to cover every required topic in the essay, but I have found some mistakes that I did too last year. Firstly, the opening should be more dashing and unique. You have to use more relative points to your desired program and, most importantly, about yourself. You can mention your passion for the culture and language, but those are not enough. You have to show your abilities and strength in the essay, which are missing here. In addition, you have to share some memorable events which impacted your life and what you experienced/did encountering those memories. I mean, you have to prove yourself better.
Rather than the essay, KGSP has a unique process. The selection committee pays attention to 4 things: language proficiency, GPA, ECAs & finally, your application. So, you better pay attention to all these. You can do better. Good Luck!!!
