christine9944
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App Essay: Building my computer, passion in creating, not using [5]
But at the time, it wasn't the intricacies of the electronics that intrigued me, but rather the idea of creating a high performance yet cheapeconomic? or maybe affordable? computer, as a sports car would excite a man; I wanted to experience the speed and power of something new.
I had thought that my excitement building my computer was in anticipation for what I could use my new computer for, but it seemed to really be the process of building and testing the computer hardware itself.
I can admire my handiwork, but my joy and excitement is not from the finished product, but rather from the process of synthesizing the ideas that form and allowing (Follow parallel structure since you used "synthesizing" earlier the assembly of it. In creating a product, a unique product,masterpiece maybe? to avoid unnecessary repetition I feel I am contributing something to the world.
This is a wonderful topic. It shows your love for creating products and emphasizes your determination to conquer your difficulties. Your essay is well-written and fully developed. Would you mind taking a look at mine?
But at the time, it wasn't the intricacies of the electronics that intrigued me, but rather the idea of creating a high performance yet cheapeconomic? or maybe affordable? computer, as a sports car would excite a man; I wanted to experience the speed and power of something new.
I had thought that my excitement building my computer was in anticipation for what I could use my new computer for, but it seemed to really be the process of building and testing the computer hardware itself.
I can admire my handiwork, but my joy and excitement is not from the finished product, but rather from the process of synthesizing the ideas that form and allowing (Follow parallel structure since you used "synthesizing" earlier the assembly of it. In creating a product, a unique product,masterpiece maybe? to avoid unnecessary repetition I feel I am contributing something to the world.
This is a wonderful topic. It shows your love for creating products and emphasizes your determination to conquer your difficulties. Your essay is well-written and fully developed. Would you mind taking a look at mine?