Chow
Jul 13, 2021
Writing Feedback / The table compares the data on the area of forests measured in hectares of various world places [5]
The essay should have more linking words
The essay should have more linking words
Chow
Jul 13, 2021
Writing Feedback / The charts show the distribution of money spent on music in three different years in Nothern Ireland [3]
@Holt
Thanks for your feedback. Well I dont really understand when you said "failed to indicate the number of pie charts included". Can you make it more clearly for me please?
@Holt
Thanks for your feedback. Well I dont really understand when you said "failed to indicate the number of pie charts included". Can you make it more clearly for me please?
Chow
Jul 13, 2021
Writing Feedback / The diagram shows the process of growing bananas for selling in supermarkets. (IELTS) [3]
you should have a small paragraph for introducing the diagram
you should have a small paragraph for introducing the diagram
Chow
Jul 12, 2021
Writing Feedback / The charts show the distribution of money spent on music in three different years in Nothern Ireland [3]
The pie charts illustrate the changes in investing money in Northern Ireland with regard to music over three years 2005, 2008, 2011.
In common, CDs became the most sought-after things that were expenditure. Otherwise, the miniature factor through the period was labeled "other".
As can be seen at the first set of data, CD sales accounted for slightly more than three-fifth. Nonetheless, the proportion plunged remarkably for a fifth in the following three years. Then, it reached a bottom at 26% in 2011.
In contract, the beginning of downloaded music was only 6%. Three years later, digital purchase leaped dramatically, which raised to 25%. By 2011, it had overtaken both concerts and CDs, accounted for more than two-fifths of all sales. On the other hand, the "other" category went up marginally from 2% to 3%. As is shown in the charts, the money disbursed on concerts oscillate moderately.
Just more than a third at the first set, it started to fall slightly over three years. Eventually, the concert sales increased at 28% in 2011.
data on investing in music
The pie charts illustrate the changes in investing money in Northern Ireland with regard to music over three years 2005, 2008, 2011.
In common, CDs became the most sought-after things that were expenditure. Otherwise, the miniature factor through the period was labeled "other".
As can be seen at the first set of data, CD sales accounted for slightly more than three-fifth. Nonetheless, the proportion plunged remarkably for a fifth in the following three years. Then, it reached a bottom at 26% in 2011.
In contract, the beginning of downloaded music was only 6%. Three years later, digital purchase leaped dramatically, which raised to 25%. By 2011, it had overtaken both concerts and CDs, accounted for more than two-fifths of all sales. On the other hand, the "other" category went up marginally from 2% to 3%. As is shown in the charts, the money disbursed on concerts oscillate moderately.
Just more than a third at the first set, it started to fall slightly over three years. Eventually, the concert sales increased at 28% in 2011.