Posts by batmankiller

batmankiller

Nov 3, 2009

Undergraduate / Question about Umich's Diversity.. Modern Art [10]

Share an experience through which you have gained respect for intellectual, social, or cultural differences. Comment on how your personal experiences and achievements would contribute to the diversity of the University of Michigan.

I seriously can't think of anything for this prompt, I haven't really been in international community program or in another country..

I was getting desperate and thinking if I wrote about how I had high stereotypes and how my two best friends that i met in high school, who happen to be part of the some of the races i had stereotypes about, break this stereotype. Only thing is I don't have a "specific experience" that showed me diversity but rather a combined experience in my years of high school with them. Would this topic be a little too cliche and not really show my respect for diversity.

Any help of any kind would be appreciated lol

batmankiller

Nov 2, 2009

Undergraduate / U of M: describe your interests and aspirations in engineering. [12]

Thank you so much Kevin, last question.. do you think there's anything wrong with my closing sentence? I feel like it's not strong enough. Obviously if i can think of a stronger one that's great, but as it is currently do you think it's ok? And yeah sorry for all these edits, but just means I take every single advice and try to incorporate it into my response :p

batmankiller

Oct 30, 2009

Undergraduate / U of M: describe your interests and aspirations in engineering. [12]

ok, I took your advice and cut out the first two and cut it into one and elaborated on nanotechnology.

batmankiller

Oct 27, 2009

Undergraduate / U of M: describe your interests and aspirations in engineering. [12]

Would a transition word help or should i just cut oen of the parts out completely?
I'm currently sporting with ..

batmankiller

Oct 26, 2009

Undergraduate / U of M: describe your interests and aspirations in engineering. [12]

College of Engineering Please describe your interests and aspirations in engineering. What experiences have influenced you?

Math and science have always fascinated me since I was a child. However, it wasn't until this year that I've decided that I had a penchant for engineering. It all started when I built my computer from scratch, drilling screws and making sure every part was in place. Something as simple as a fan not working can fry your CPU in just 20 seconds. When the lights finally went green and the startup screen was on, I knew I had completed my goal. This diligent yet rewarding procedure is what I love about building. The satisfaction knowing that you are why the product is standing in its entirety is insurmountable. Even so, I don't think I ever truly understood engineering to say I aspired to be an engineer-until now.

While I enjoy building things I also fancy chemistry and medicine. I finally found a way to combine these two predilections of mine into one-nanotechnology. After being introduced to nanotechnology on Discovery channel, I was definitely captivated. Nanotechnology turns out to be the bridge to all my ambitions. It allows me to build machinery on a sub-atomic level and then use them for medical applications, including curing cancer.

Additionally, my interests in nanotechnology stem from the fact that we are just beginning to learn about nanotechnology which means I can actually help contribute to our knowledge on such an arcane subject. I believe that University of Michigan is a place where I can explore this ambition. With its specialized Nanotechnology Institute for Medicine and Biological Sciences, I can learn not only from its insightful engineering program but also delve into the intricacies of nanotechnology. It is there I will be able to combine my interests in math and science and my ventures to help society.

I fixed up my last sentence.. I don't think it's very strong though.. still.

batmankiller

Oct 26, 2009

Undergraduate / death is only way to happiness? U of M essay 500 words [8]

^ I'm not sure sure if 3 paragraphs is really necessary or you could even merge 2 and 3 to shorter paragraphs. You say you're 40 words over, I think cutting down the second paragraph and merging it with the third would be nice.

Ethan Frome is a man torn between what he wants to do, and what he should do. His love for learning and keenness for engineering could have led Ethan to a much better life. Unfortunately, the town's people make Ethan feel obligated to marry his cousin Zeena in return for all the care she brought to his ill mother. In the end he believes his only way to happiness is escaping his miserable life through death. Likewise, I feel obligated to stay at home with my family for college. Traditionally a Middle Eastern girl stays in her parents' home till she marries, and with all that they have done for me how can I leave them? After finishing the book I came to realize that I had two options; I could follow Ethan's example as he did what people expected him to do by marrying Zeena and staying on the farm; or I could be assertive and challenge myself at great institution such the University of Michigan Ann Arbor? The answer if one could not realize by reading this essay, is to challenge myself and pop out of the traditional Middle Eastern bubble also known as my house. If there is one thing that reading Ethan Frome taught me is to not conform to other people, but rather take my own lead on life and do what it is that I believe will make me happy. My intelligence and love for learning can take me too many different successful places as Ethan's could have, and although I value the opinions of my family I do not want to be like Ethan wondering 'what if" everyday searching for a way out of a life I did not choose.

In essence, I learned from Ethan that if I want to be happy in my future then I should start making the decisions for it myself and not let others influence it. I need to be challenged not only with intelligence but also with how well I can stick to tradition when I am surrounded by many other differing ones. I feel that University of Michigan Ann Arbor is where I need to be in order to not follow Ethan's mistake and lead a life of success and happiness.

Sorry I tried, not sure if I helped, but yes definitely cut down ont he summary, 2-3 sentences is enough.