Writing Feedback / SHOULD ALL WILD ANIMAL BE PROTECTED OR ONLY SOME [4]

While some suggested = Typo? or what? why you put while in the first sentence?

I think it's still lack of your opinion. You need to put your opinion as they ask to put it

Writing Feedback / Fewer and fewer young people are choosing to become teachers. How could this be changed? [4]

I found some typo :
1. Low incomes
2. Their jobs had had ... = Double had

Please be careful with your writing!