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tintiah

Sep 16, 2021

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - ENVIRONMENT PROBLEMS: THE LOSS OF ANIMALS AND PLANTS OR OTHER ISSUES? [11]

In the introduction, you havent presented either the task' issue or your own opinion. Moreover, there are also some grammatical errors as well as some spelling mistakes that I think you should revise after finishing your writing. Moreover, in the body paragraphs, you have already expressed thouroughly your view of supporting the first sentence of the task, which is good. However, you lacked the other side of issue that the task requires as well: "others say there are more important environmental problems.".

That's my opinion. Maybe it is not that perfect but I hope it is useful to u

tintiah

Sep 14, 2021

Writing Feedback / International students in the UK attending and achieving second or even higher class degrees [4]

the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK University

At a university in the uk, there are not only uk but also many international students attending and achieving second or even better class degrees. The bar chart clearly illustrates the percentage of the two groups of students.

In some society-related subjects, there is obviously more uk students who take and get a higher education. In art history and sociology, the home students dominate with 5-10 percentage higher in comparision. In internation law and english literature, there is a much bigger gap. Whereas, the foreign students only make up around 50 percent, the local students account for up to 20 percent higher.

The international students, however, also express their strengths at two subjects: electrical engineering and information technology. Espeacially, in it, there is only around three out of five home students compared to the 85 percent of the oversea ones.

Moreover, there is also a equal percenage of the two sections of students continuing and gaining better degrees in nursing( over three quarters) and accountancy( exactly sixty percent).

Overall, the column graph demonstrates the percentage of two kinds of students following higher education as well as gives us the perception that any of the two have their own strengths and weaknesses denoted in certain subjects.