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Nov 30, 2021
Writing Feedback / Writing task 1 line graph - The changes in the rates of birth and death in New Zealand from 1901 [4]
Hello everyone. This is the first time I finished a writing task, so I am posting it here to find some feedback. Thank you for reading. 🙆♀️
The line graph illustrates the changes in the rates of birth and death in New Zealand from 1901 and gives the forecast trends until 2101.
Overall, both birth and death rates have increased, but the number of deaths has been more steadily rising.
For 40 years, from 1901, the birth rate fluctuated from 20000 to 30000. Then it was pumped up to the highest point in 1961. After that, the rate of birth started to decline slowly, to about 45,000 by the end of the period.
Compared with the birth rate, the number of deaths from 1901 to recently was lower. However, after a steady increase in progress, the rate of death will be overlooked in 1941 and reach its peak in 2061. Since that time, the number of deaths has stopped augmenting and maintained a level of about 60,000.
Writing task 1 line graph.
This is my first time, can you give me some comments?Hello everyone. This is the first time I finished a writing task, so I am posting it here to find some feedback. Thank you for reading. 🙆♀️
The line graph illustrates the changes in the rates of birth and death in New Zealand from 1901 and gives the forecast trends until 2101.
Overall, both birth and death rates have increased, but the number of deaths has been more steadily rising.
For 40 years, from 1901, the birth rate fluctuated from 20000 to 30000. Then it was pumped up to the highest point in 1961. After that, the rate of birth started to decline slowly, to about 45,000 by the end of the period.
Compared with the birth rate, the number of deaths from 1901 to recently was lower. However, after a steady increase in progress, the rate of death will be overlooked in 1941 and reach its peak in 2061. Since that time, the number of deaths has stopped augmenting and maintained a level of about 60,000.
