Undergraduate / Aviation - Essay question for a job? I enjoy flying. I am a student pilot. [5]

Hello everyone,
I have just come across this website and I was so happy I have been looking into a job as an ATC. I started filling out my applicationg and was stumped by the essay question. I dont remember the last time I wrote and essay or even where to start. I have attached the Essay question and the first draft of the essay i wrote. Is this even an essay? is it any good? or should i post it on FAIL BLOG? I also went over the 300 words by 41 words... Ideas?

In proper sentence format 250 - 300 words respond to the following question:

Please describe what motivated you to undertake this significant challenge and what sets you apart from others who are interested in this same career path

Notes:
I enjoy flying. I am a student pilot. I feel motivation when challenged. I strive to do the best I can at everything I try. I dont give up. I love to talk.

Essay:
I have always enjoyed aviation. A few years ago I went down to one of the many flight schools and signed up for a familiarization flight. I was a little nervous but mostly just excited. As soon as I took the controls of the Cessna 152 I knew that a career in aviation was for me. During my ground school we got to take a tour of the control tower at the airport. This was an eye opening experience. I learned all about how air traffic controllers see and communicate with all of the planes in the control zone. This was my career in aviation staring me in the face. I cant think of a better way to explore and learn about aviation than directing and controlling air traffic. Having the opportunity to working with top of the line technology, instruments and people in the navigation network, knowing at the end of the day I helped many people travel safely in the sky.

I am a flooring installer by trade. I enjoy installing flooring because every day is a new challenge and we work together as a team. It is a very diverse job in which situations change from day to day. I have worked on jobs with large crews in which I am the one to delegate the work that needs to be done by each installer to ensure the job is completed in a smooth manner. I have also worked on crews in which someone else is the foreman and I am assigned a certain task. One of my responsibilities as a flooring installer is talking with customers, salesmen and dispatchers. I am very good at talking to people and explaining things. I think that these skills will help me in my journey to becoming an air traffic controller.

Thanks for reading,
Camodan
I look forward to hearing from the Essay Masters lol.