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Nov 29, 2007
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Nov 27, 2007
Essays / Reflection Essay, but broad description [9]
I had to write a rhetorical analysis for English class. But then I got it back with a horrible grade; the teacher said that had to add more of my thoughts and "rhetoric." But I don't know what to do with it! Can you please help me?
Originally written by David Brooks for the New York Times in 2003, "Love, Internet Style" in this instance was taken from the McGraw Hill Reader (9th edition) by Gilbert H. Muller, pg. 323. This essay has fourteen paragraphs; although not stated, the implied thesis is "The Internet facilitates personal relationships."
The opening statement of this essay is laconic - "The Internet slows things down." Hereby, Brooks establishes his introduction. The following paragraph goes on to expand his first statement. He claims that the online dating process progresses with a slower pace, i.e. people get to know each other better before they get more serious and intimate.
His next claim is summarized by his own words - "For generations Americans had certain courtship rituals." The author proceeds to examine the general progress of traditional courtship - dates, kissing, petting, etc... "But," he asserts, "Over the past few decades that structure dissolved." People found that the Internet can help them establish the relationships they want. To prove his statement, David Brooks presents staggering statistics - forty million Americans each month visit online dating sites. "The online dating scene is like a real estate market..." In the author's opinion, online dating is a transaction or operation, but it also can be very affectionate.
Then the author begins to describe the steps - "It begins with sorting." People search for their date specifying age, education, religious or ethnic background. This way they find the exact date they wish. And, as if a sudden thought stroke him, Brooks reflects on the side effect of online dating - acceleration of social stratification. He underlines the fact that highly educated people are more likely to find each other.
After sorting, people go to the next step - they hunt for dates with "good looks" - physical appearance. This factor, as the author notices, is much more compelling than income. However, the search does not end there - "But there are also autobiographical essays." Online daters compose intellectual articles about themselves telling how they are "sensual yet smart". When writing autobiographies, women on these sites pose themselves very self-confident. One woman on Match.com tells about herself in very expressive terms. Another female implies to the reader that she is just the one you want. Nonetheless, men make most of the contacts; they exchange online correspondence, tell true and false stories about themselves. Besides that, men are the ones that are more likely to be predators. Males request for more photos, in some cases calling females very meaningful names. Women tend to set the pace by responding negatively or positively.
Nearing the end, the author contemplates "... Internet relationships are at least as powerful as relationships that begin face to face." For many the keyboard is a much better source of communication than a traditional dialogue. In many cases, the slower pace of online interaction can be beneficial in the establishment of more lasting relationships. Although the word "love" seldom appears on the webpage, the essence of all online dates is still love...
David Brooks establishes his authority in this essay by presenting the topic in a very authoritative and convincing style. He hardly gives place for doubts by using concrete facts. The author seems very persuasive about this issue of online dating. He establishes a formal setting in which his role as the author is to inform. The writer appears to have studied the subject in depth. He gives a list of different websites that people sort through to find their date. (JDate, EHarmony, Vanity Date) He includes statistics that support his claims. He mentions that about one-fifth of online daters are married men. (par. 11) He also introduces the results of "studies by Katelyn McKenna at N.Y.U. and others" that also reinforce his claim - that Cyberspace relationships are at least as powerful as relationships that begin in the flesh.
But on the other hand, the author seems to criticize online dating. He appears to have an underlying cynicism not noticeable on the surface. His quote "The online dating scene is like a real estate market where people go to fulfill their most sensitive needs" vaguely but unquestionably states his personal beliefs. By calling this process "ruthlessly transactional and strangely tender" he sets himself aside. Furthermore, he states: "The online dating world is superficially cynical." His approach to this subject is not merely informative, but also that of irony.
David Brooks assumes that his audience is not familiar with this new way of courting; thus, he explains the online dating process in detail. But he does not merely inform; he aspires to persuade the reader to uphold his disdain for this ruthless transaction.
Nevertheless, the author does not seem pushy about his opinion. He allows room for other opinions. He is even somewhat optimistic saying "But despite all the class competition, all the marketing, all the shopping around, people connect." And as is if he is scornfully smiling he concludes "But love is what this is all about. And the heart, even in this commercial age, finds a way."
I had to write a rhetorical analysis for English class. But then I got it back with a horrible grade; the teacher said that had to add more of my thoughts and "rhetoric." But I don't know what to do with it! Can you please help me?
Originally written by David Brooks for the New York Times in 2003, "Love, Internet Style" in this instance was taken from the McGraw Hill Reader (9th edition) by Gilbert H. Muller, pg. 323. This essay has fourteen paragraphs; although not stated, the implied thesis is "The Internet facilitates personal relationships."
The opening statement of this essay is laconic - "The Internet slows things down." Hereby, Brooks establishes his introduction. The following paragraph goes on to expand his first statement. He claims that the online dating process progresses with a slower pace, i.e. people get to know each other better before they get more serious and intimate.
His next claim is summarized by his own words - "For generations Americans had certain courtship rituals." The author proceeds to examine the general progress of traditional courtship - dates, kissing, petting, etc... "But," he asserts, "Over the past few decades that structure dissolved." People found that the Internet can help them establish the relationships they want. To prove his statement, David Brooks presents staggering statistics - forty million Americans each month visit online dating sites. "The online dating scene is like a real estate market..." In the author's opinion, online dating is a transaction or operation, but it also can be very affectionate.
Then the author begins to describe the steps - "It begins with sorting." People search for their date specifying age, education, religious or ethnic background. This way they find the exact date they wish. And, as if a sudden thought stroke him, Brooks reflects on the side effect of online dating - acceleration of social stratification. He underlines the fact that highly educated people are more likely to find each other.
After sorting, people go to the next step - they hunt for dates with "good looks" - physical appearance. This factor, as the author notices, is much more compelling than income. However, the search does not end there - "But there are also autobiographical essays." Online daters compose intellectual articles about themselves telling how they are "sensual yet smart". When writing autobiographies, women on these sites pose themselves very self-confident. One woman on Match.com tells about herself in very expressive terms. Another female implies to the reader that she is just the one you want. Nonetheless, men make most of the contacts; they exchange online correspondence, tell true and false stories about themselves. Besides that, men are the ones that are more likely to be predators. Males request for more photos, in some cases calling females very meaningful names. Women tend to set the pace by responding negatively or positively.
Nearing the end, the author contemplates "... Internet relationships are at least as powerful as relationships that begin face to face." For many the keyboard is a much better source of communication than a traditional dialogue. In many cases, the slower pace of online interaction can be beneficial in the establishment of more lasting relationships. Although the word "love" seldom appears on the webpage, the essence of all online dates is still love...
David Brooks establishes his authority in this essay by presenting the topic in a very authoritative and convincing style. He hardly gives place for doubts by using concrete facts. The author seems very persuasive about this issue of online dating. He establishes a formal setting in which his role as the author is to inform. The writer appears to have studied the subject in depth. He gives a list of different websites that people sort through to find their date. (JDate, EHarmony, Vanity Date) He includes statistics that support his claims. He mentions that about one-fifth of online daters are married men. (par. 11) He also introduces the results of "studies by Katelyn McKenna at N.Y.U. and others" that also reinforce his claim - that Cyberspace relationships are at least as powerful as relationships that begin in the flesh.
But on the other hand, the author seems to criticize online dating. He appears to have an underlying cynicism not noticeable on the surface. His quote "The online dating scene is like a real estate market where people go to fulfill their most sensitive needs" vaguely but unquestionably states his personal beliefs. By calling this process "ruthlessly transactional and strangely tender" he sets himself aside. Furthermore, he states: "The online dating world is superficially cynical." His approach to this subject is not merely informative, but also that of irony.
David Brooks assumes that his audience is not familiar with this new way of courting; thus, he explains the online dating process in detail. But he does not merely inform; he aspires to persuade the reader to uphold his disdain for this ruthless transaction.
Nevertheless, the author does not seem pushy about his opinion. He allows room for other opinions. He is even somewhat optimistic saying "But despite all the class competition, all the marketing, all the shopping around, people connect." And as is if he is scornfully smiling he concludes "But love is what this is all about. And the heart, even in this commercial age, finds a way."
Vit
Nov 27, 2007
Research Papers / "The American Way of Life" - it is at jeopardy currently [2]
Could you please edit a research paper for me?
Watch Out!
"Watch Out?! What do you mean by that?"
"Your jobs are being taken away!"
"How is that?"
The American way of life is at jeopardy. American jobs are being threatened by globalization; in fact the amount of good jobs is diminishing at an alarming rate. But we as Americans can and must do something if we are to stay successful in this competitive world.
What is globalization anyway? Many authorities have described it, but what does this term really mean? Globalization is the interconnectedness of the entire world: no matter what place we are located on the globe, we can connect to each other in a matter of seconds. In most cases globalization is defined as economic globalization. Jagdish N. Bhagwati elaborates, "Economic globalization constitutes integration of national economies into the international economy through trade, direct foreign investment (by corporations and multinationals), short term capital flows, international flow of workers and humanity generally, and flows of technology" (3).
As a result of this connection, many lower-level countries have emerged as growing markets for entrepreneurs. These entrepreneurs have opened up a whole new level of business strategies - outsourcing and offshoring. Mr. Phil B. asserts that a lot of American companies have transferred their manufacturing outside of America because of cost efficiency. "Furthermore," he states, "Service and technical jobs are currently undergoing a large exodus to foreign labor too. This is now called outsourcing and offshoring." Sharon P. Brown and Lewis B. Siegel give a concrete definition of these two terms:
Outsourcing is the movement of work that was formerly conducted in-house by employees paid directly by a company to a different company. The different company can be located inside or outside of the United States. The work can occur at a different geographic location or remain onsite.
Offshoring is the movement of work from within the United States to locations outside of the United States. "Offshoring" can occur within the same company and involve movement of work to a different location of that company outside of the United States, or to a different company altogether (Offshoring/outsourcing). (5)
But why would our companies do such a thing? The fact is many rising countries with a lot of human brainpower potential like India, China, and Russia have recently emerged as rivals to the American corporations. In order to stay competitive, many companies have done extensive research and found astounding facts. A computer engineer in India can receive at least twice as less salary than a respective American performing the same function, which means that they will hire 100 Indians who will do the job of only 50 or even less Americans. As a result, the 50 American engineers are laid off from their company, and their way of life is seriously altered.
So why should we watch out? As was mentioned earlier, an increasing amount of job positions are being outsourced by local American corporations to foreign countries. As these job positions diminish, scores of American citizens are laid off. Researchers from the Cornell University claim that 9%-11% of extended layoffs involve outsourcing (CRS-10). Stephanie Luce and Kate Bronfenbrenner while examining Massachusetts, report that over 20% of the overall layoffs are because of offshore outsourcing (24). Nevertheless, Eduardo Porter of the New York Times believes that this issue is "overblown". In his article "Not Many Jobs Are Sent Abroad, U.S. Report Says" he states: "A new report released yesterday by the Labor Department on mass layoffs found that in the first quarter of this year, 4,633 workers were laid off because their jobs were moved overseas, a mere 2.5 percent of the total of 182,456 longer-term job losses reported by companies in the period."
Nevertheless, all of this information casts many people into gloom and despair. Many enthusiastic college students who started with high hopes of acquiring necessary knowledge to compete and get a decent job are suddenly enlightened - and their soaring dreams are mercilessly flung into the dungeon of depression and pessimism. After spending so much time, so much money, so much effort on furthering their education, the students realize that their jobs are already taken away from them!
As we continue to examine the American job market and the influence of globalization on it, we can recognize the implications that it has on us. Thomas Friedman, a well-known foreign affairs columnist for The New York Times, in his book The World is Flat, identifies this matter as "the quiet crisis". He writes, "This quiet crisis involves the steady erosion of America's scientific and engineering base, which has always been the source of American innovation and our rising standard of living." Politicians and businessmen console us with statistics claiming that the economy is growing; in essence, they are saying, "The sun is shining brightly." As in a case of a great storm, the weather before it is usually very calm. But, based on experience, meteorologists know that whenever the barometric pressure falls at a certain rate, a storm is brewing. A scrupulous observer can perceive economic "gauges", and predict the grave results.
But as in the case of cancer, early diagnosis and treatment can prevent fatal outcome. Louis Pasteur once gave a very explicit recommendation, "Fortune favors the prepared mind." By preparing for this "quiet crisis", we as Americans can succeed. But by no means will this be easy. Many political, educational, economical and personal reforms are to be instituted in order for America to be on a level plane with the emerging "flat world" (Thomas Friedman).
The government must become aware of this impending crisis. Furthermore, it must reconstruct its employment laws and regulations. The government must educate the population of this approaching threat. Congress must endorse more education subsidies for the lower class so as to equalize the educational standard of Americans with that of rival competitors.
John Meredith gives advice to engineers, but it can be applied to any job - "Engineers can cope with the challenges of globalization by being flexible and adaptable." He then gives a helpful list of strategies which will help the striving. He advises: "Be a top-notch competitor. [. . .] Be a contributor. Be innovative. Understand the competition. TRY SOMETHING NEW".
Benjamin Franklin once stated: "By failing to prepare, you are preparing to fail." We, the citizens of the United States of America, must plan, prepare and watch out; and like T. Friedman wrote, "Brace yourself: You are now about to enter the flat world."
Could you please edit a research paper for me?
Watch Out!
"Watch Out?! What do you mean by that?"
"Your jobs are being taken away!"
"How is that?"
The American way of life is at jeopardy. American jobs are being threatened by globalization; in fact the amount of good jobs is diminishing at an alarming rate. But we as Americans can and must do something if we are to stay successful in this competitive world.
What is globalization anyway? Many authorities have described it, but what does this term really mean? Globalization is the interconnectedness of the entire world: no matter what place we are located on the globe, we can connect to each other in a matter of seconds. In most cases globalization is defined as economic globalization. Jagdish N. Bhagwati elaborates, "Economic globalization constitutes integration of national economies into the international economy through trade, direct foreign investment (by corporations and multinationals), short term capital flows, international flow of workers and humanity generally, and flows of technology" (3).
As a result of this connection, many lower-level countries have emerged as growing markets for entrepreneurs. These entrepreneurs have opened up a whole new level of business strategies - outsourcing and offshoring. Mr. Phil B. asserts that a lot of American companies have transferred their manufacturing outside of America because of cost efficiency. "Furthermore," he states, "Service and technical jobs are currently undergoing a large exodus to foreign labor too. This is now called outsourcing and offshoring." Sharon P. Brown and Lewis B. Siegel give a concrete definition of these two terms:
Outsourcing is the movement of work that was formerly conducted in-house by employees paid directly by a company to a different company. The different company can be located inside or outside of the United States. The work can occur at a different geographic location or remain onsite.
Offshoring is the movement of work from within the United States to locations outside of the United States. "Offshoring" can occur within the same company and involve movement of work to a different location of that company outside of the United States, or to a different company altogether (Offshoring/outsourcing). (5)
But why would our companies do such a thing? The fact is many rising countries with a lot of human brainpower potential like India, China, and Russia have recently emerged as rivals to the American corporations. In order to stay competitive, many companies have done extensive research and found astounding facts. A computer engineer in India can receive at least twice as less salary than a respective American performing the same function, which means that they will hire 100 Indians who will do the job of only 50 or even less Americans. As a result, the 50 American engineers are laid off from their company, and their way of life is seriously altered.
So why should we watch out? As was mentioned earlier, an increasing amount of job positions are being outsourced by local American corporations to foreign countries. As these job positions diminish, scores of American citizens are laid off. Researchers from the Cornell University claim that 9%-11% of extended layoffs involve outsourcing (CRS-10). Stephanie Luce and Kate Bronfenbrenner while examining Massachusetts, report that over 20% of the overall layoffs are because of offshore outsourcing (24). Nevertheless, Eduardo Porter of the New York Times believes that this issue is "overblown". In his article "Not Many Jobs Are Sent Abroad, U.S. Report Says" he states: "A new report released yesterday by the Labor Department on mass layoffs found that in the first quarter of this year, 4,633 workers were laid off because their jobs were moved overseas, a mere 2.5 percent of the total of 182,456 longer-term job losses reported by companies in the period."
Nevertheless, all of this information casts many people into gloom and despair. Many enthusiastic college students who started with high hopes of acquiring necessary knowledge to compete and get a decent job are suddenly enlightened - and their soaring dreams are mercilessly flung into the dungeon of depression and pessimism. After spending so much time, so much money, so much effort on furthering their education, the students realize that their jobs are already taken away from them!
As we continue to examine the American job market and the influence of globalization on it, we can recognize the implications that it has on us. Thomas Friedman, a well-known foreign affairs columnist for The New York Times, in his book The World is Flat, identifies this matter as "the quiet crisis". He writes, "This quiet crisis involves the steady erosion of America's scientific and engineering base, which has always been the source of American innovation and our rising standard of living." Politicians and businessmen console us with statistics claiming that the economy is growing; in essence, they are saying, "The sun is shining brightly." As in a case of a great storm, the weather before it is usually very calm. But, based on experience, meteorologists know that whenever the barometric pressure falls at a certain rate, a storm is brewing. A scrupulous observer can perceive economic "gauges", and predict the grave results.
But as in the case of cancer, early diagnosis and treatment can prevent fatal outcome. Louis Pasteur once gave a very explicit recommendation, "Fortune favors the prepared mind." By preparing for this "quiet crisis", we as Americans can succeed. But by no means will this be easy. Many political, educational, economical and personal reforms are to be instituted in order for America to be on a level plane with the emerging "flat world" (Thomas Friedman).
The government must become aware of this impending crisis. Furthermore, it must reconstruct its employment laws and regulations. The government must educate the population of this approaching threat. Congress must endorse more education subsidies for the lower class so as to equalize the educational standard of Americans with that of rival competitors.
John Meredith gives advice to engineers, but it can be applied to any job - "Engineers can cope with the challenges of globalization by being flexible and adaptable." He then gives a helpful list of strategies which will help the striving. He advises: "Be a top-notch competitor. [. . .] Be a contributor. Be innovative. Understand the competition. TRY SOMETHING NEW".
Benjamin Franklin once stated: "By failing to prepare, you are preparing to fail." We, the citizens of the United States of America, must plan, prepare and watch out; and like T. Friedman wrote, "Brace yourself: You are now about to enter the flat world."
Vit
Nov 27, 2007
Essays / Reflection Essay, but broad description [9]
Thank you so much for your editorial remarks. I was at loss from what to start; your sentence really kicked me off. Thank you once again.
BTW, can you edit another one of my papers?
Thank you so much for your editorial remarks. I was at loss from what to start; your sentence really kicked me off. Thank you once again.
BTW, can you edit another one of my papers?
Vit
Nov 26, 2007
Essays / Reflection Essay, but broad description [9]
Hello! Here's my essay. I have some "heavy" places which I don't know how I should resolve.
One More Voyage
I stared at the admissions form and thought, "This couldn't be more confusing if it were in Chinese." I had launched on a new trip - a trip instigated with the tedious process of registration and admission at the Pierce College and concluded with anxious studying for class exams and finals. I could not possibly fathom everything I would have to go through in order to progress to the position where I am now. But as I grappled my way through the "Name_________, Address________, Phone #_________, etc" I realized that I was about to embark into a life-changing voyage - one that would change my future, crystallize my vocation, and broaden my vistas.
As I was hurled from one office to another, a steady influx of irresistible determination in me increased. I reasoned, "No matter how hard it goes, I am going to get ahead and succeed." Gritting my teeth, I bluffed my way through the rigorous gates of admission and into the corridor of advising. My patience and longsuffering was severely tested as I lingered in the Advising Center many a grueling hour, hoping in vain for my chance to see Mr. Advisor. Then, I was safely guided out of the corridor of advising into the foyer of registration. To my utter astonishment, the classes deemed "Available" by the advisor were regrettably booked. So with dejection in my voice I conceded to be entered into the "Wait List", not knowing exactly what that meant. All I knew was that I had to wait an unspecified period of time for an indefinite opening in my classes. Providentially, I received a call within several weeks which spared my inexplicable apprehension. In that phone call I was notified by a woman with a starchy voice, "Your classes are now available. You may come in to pay." The very next day many visitors cast questioning looks on an enthusiastic young man who approached the Cashiers desk with a spring in his step. In no time I was through with paying the excessive tuition bills, and plunged headlong into locating and securing the appropriate textbooks. By then I had actually began to feel an ironic measure of self-confidence as I navigated through the campus "waters". Nevertheless, as would any explorer I took measures of precaution and preparation. I painstakingly charted my course on the maps of Pierce College; after that I verified the whereabouts of my future classes.
Thus, the eventful beginning of a journey through the deep waters of wisdom and knowledge I heretofore have not ventured to undertake has led and will lead me to a bright and optimistic future.
Hello! Here's my essay. I have some "heavy" places which I don't know how I should resolve.
One More Voyage
I stared at the admissions form and thought, "This couldn't be more confusing if it were in Chinese." I had launched on a new trip - a trip instigated with the tedious process of registration and admission at the Pierce College and concluded with anxious studying for class exams and finals. I could not possibly fathom everything I would have to go through in order to progress to the position where I am now. But as I grappled my way through the "Name_________, Address________, Phone #_________, etc" I realized that I was about to embark into a life-changing voyage - one that would change my future, crystallize my vocation, and broaden my vistas.
As I was hurled from one office to another, a steady influx of irresistible determination in me increased. I reasoned, "No matter how hard it goes, I am going to get ahead and succeed." Gritting my teeth, I bluffed my way through the rigorous gates of admission and into the corridor of advising. My patience and longsuffering was severely tested as I lingered in the Advising Center many a grueling hour, hoping in vain for my chance to see Mr. Advisor. Then, I was safely guided out of the corridor of advising into the foyer of registration. To my utter astonishment, the classes deemed "Available" by the advisor were regrettably booked. So with dejection in my voice I conceded to be entered into the "Wait List", not knowing exactly what that meant. All I knew was that I had to wait an unspecified period of time for an indefinite opening in my classes. Providentially, I received a call within several weeks which spared my inexplicable apprehension. In that phone call I was notified by a woman with a starchy voice, "Your classes are now available. You may come in to pay." The very next day many visitors cast questioning looks on an enthusiastic young man who approached the Cashiers desk with a spring in his step. In no time I was through with paying the excessive tuition bills, and plunged headlong into locating and securing the appropriate textbooks. By then I had actually began to feel an ironic measure of self-confidence as I navigated through the campus "waters". Nevertheless, as would any explorer I took measures of precaution and preparation. I painstakingly charted my course on the maps of Pierce College; after that I verified the whereabouts of my future classes.
Thus, the eventful beginning of a journey through the deep waters of wisdom and knowledge I heretofore have not ventured to undertake has led and will lead me to a bright and optimistic future.
Vit
Nov 22, 2007
Essays / Reflection Essay, but broad description [9]
I need to write a reflection essay for class. But I have a problem. The instructor gave a very broad description of what to do - personal experience, with some "hidden" purpose (thesis statement implied). I had a hard time picking a topic, but finally I choose my college admissions and further freshman quarter. But I can't think of what to start with, and continue also. Plz help if you can.
I need to write a reflection essay for class. But I have a problem. The instructor gave a very broad description of what to do - personal experience, with some "hidden" purpose (thesis statement implied). I had a hard time picking a topic, but finally I choose my college admissions and further freshman quarter. But I can't think of what to start with, and continue also. Plz help if you can.
