ChauAnnnh
Jul 4, 2022
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Crimes committed by young people are increasing in major cities throughout the world [2]
In this day and age, it is true that more and more juveniles commit an offense worldwide. As far as I am concerned, the reasons related to this phenomenon vary and several measures can be implemented to persuade others to reduce this trend.
The reasons why many youngsters break the law are twofold. One of the prominent causes is the omnipresence of violent films or games. Young people, unlike adults, do not have the strong ability to distinguish right from wrong. Besides, excessive violence in the virtual world renders them aggressive and navigates them to consider violence as the optimal solution to tackle obstacles and show their personality as heroes who punish evil they enjoy on television. In some situations, patients who are over obsessed with the scene of fights on games online can commit serious offenses such as murder or robbery. Secondly, due to the high poverty rate in several countries, having supported their family's finance, many children take part in unlawful activities like pickpocketing or tricking visitors as a way of making a living.
It is parents and the government that have to take responsibility for solving this issue. Firstly, the family should put together with the school to manage and adjust the sources of entertainment their children enjoy and educate them on how to make healthy use of films and games. Moreover, providing financial support for the poor area and creating more employment opportunities for youth is highly recommended to rise their income and raise awareness of what punishment they will face if offending.
In conclusion, both the prevalence of entertainment which consists of violent factors, and the demand to earn money for a living are considered as the chief culprit behind the increasing number of young criminals. Join efforts of the goverment and parents will help reduce the levels of youth crimes.
youngsters break the law
In this day and age, it is true that more and more juveniles commit an offense worldwide. As far as I am concerned, the reasons related to this phenomenon vary and several measures can be implemented to persuade others to reduce this trend.
The reasons why many youngsters break the law are twofold. One of the prominent causes is the omnipresence of violent films or games. Young people, unlike adults, do not have the strong ability to distinguish right from wrong. Besides, excessive violence in the virtual world renders them aggressive and navigates them to consider violence as the optimal solution to tackle obstacles and show their personality as heroes who punish evil they enjoy on television. In some situations, patients who are over obsessed with the scene of fights on games online can commit serious offenses such as murder or robbery. Secondly, due to the high poverty rate in several countries, having supported their family's finance, many children take part in unlawful activities like pickpocketing or tricking visitors as a way of making a living.
It is parents and the government that have to take responsibility for solving this issue. Firstly, the family should put together with the school to manage and adjust the sources of entertainment their children enjoy and educate them on how to make healthy use of films and games. Moreover, providing financial support for the poor area and creating more employment opportunities for youth is highly recommended to rise their income and raise awareness of what punishment they will face if offending.
In conclusion, both the prevalence of entertainment which consists of violent factors, and the demand to earn money for a living are considered as the chief culprit behind the increasing number of young criminals. Join efforts of the goverment and parents will help reduce the levels of youth crimes.
