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Jul 6, 2022
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Regarding the quantity of Internet Express fluctuated over the period given. This figure started at under $100,000 and went down slightly to $80,000 in April then levelled off there until June. The period from November to December witnessed an impressive increase to under $140,000 in the figure for Internet Express after growing gradually to around $120,000 between July and November. The number of Wi-fi Café rose inconsiderately to over $60,000 in March. This figure grew sharply to nearly $100,000 in July before declining steeply to about $60,000 in September. Wi-fi Café' number of incomes went up rapidly to approximately $19,000 over the next four months. The figure for Café Cool income went up and down between over $30,000 and nearly $60,000 during the first nine months. The was a marginal growth of $60,000 in that of Café Cool and reach the highest point of $120,000 in December.
The graph shows the income of four cafes in New York in 12 months over the last year.
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Regarding the quantity of Internet Express fluctuated over the period given. This figure started at under $100,000 and went down slightly to $80,000 in April then levelled off there until June. The period from November to December witnessed an impressive increase to under $140,000 in the figure for Internet Express after growing gradually to around $120,000 between July and November. The number of Wi-fi Café rose inconsiderately to over $60,000 in March. This figure grew sharply to nearly $100,000 in July before declining steeply to about $60,000 in September. Wi-fi Café' number of incomes went up rapidly to approximately $19,000 over the next four months. The figure for Café Cool income went up and down between over $30,000 and nearly $60,000 during the first nine months. The was a marginal growth of $60,000 in that of Café Cool and reach the highest point of $120,000 in December.
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