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Oct 16, 2022
Undergraduate / Brave and enterprising women - The "Why Barnard College?" essay [2]
Hi! Please tell me if my essay is too smeared in terms of meaning? Should it be more specific? The prompt:
What factors encouraged your decision to apply to Barnard College, and why do you think the college would be a good match for you?
Raising as a girl in STEM in the Caucasus (which is rare and sometimes even strange in my society), I always dreamed about freedom in activity without any social or gender borders in a close-knit woman community. Exploring Barnard, I concluded that it could provide me with this oasis of freedom and the opportunities I dreamed about. Barnard supports women, who wish to pursue higher education, and gives them vital skills to achieve their goals.
Thanks to Barnard's flexible curriculum and diverse student organizations, I can study subjects I am interested in and try various hobbies Barnard offers. I would explore the mobility of labor and capital globally by taking International Trade with Reka Juhasz. Within the Physics & Astronomy department, I'd elaborate on what the future holds for humankind in space exploration during The Science of Space Exploration course. The small class sizes at Barnard would help me communicate better with the faculty, staff, and my peers.
In addition to a variety of courses, Barnard College allows its students to develop outside the classroom walls. Thanks to the Athena Center for Leadership, I'd learn more about running a successful business. Also, I would be able to interact with other students with similar business interests during our conversations at the Milstein Center. As a result of these meetings, I would come up with my startup idea and present it to other students during the Activation session. In my free time, I'd like to visit Barnard Bookworms, where I would discuss books I read in detail with other club members and have a great time with them.
After finishing my Barnard research, I concluded that Barnard College is a community of brave and enterprising women who are eager to change our world, and I am ready to become a part of it.
Hi! Please tell me if my essay is too smeared in terms of meaning? Should it be more specific? The prompt:
What factors encouraged your decision to apply to Barnard College, and why do you think the college would be a good match for you?
Why Barnard College?
Raising as a girl in STEM in the Caucasus (which is rare and sometimes even strange in my society), I always dreamed about freedom in activity without any social or gender borders in a close-knit woman community. Exploring Barnard, I concluded that it could provide me with this oasis of freedom and the opportunities I dreamed about. Barnard supports women, who wish to pursue higher education, and gives them vital skills to achieve their goals.
Thanks to Barnard's flexible curriculum and diverse student organizations, I can study subjects I am interested in and try various hobbies Barnard offers. I would explore the mobility of labor and capital globally by taking International Trade with Reka Juhasz. Within the Physics & Astronomy department, I'd elaborate on what the future holds for humankind in space exploration during The Science of Space Exploration course. The small class sizes at Barnard would help me communicate better with the faculty, staff, and my peers.
In addition to a variety of courses, Barnard College allows its students to develop outside the classroom walls. Thanks to the Athena Center for Leadership, I'd learn more about running a successful business. Also, I would be able to interact with other students with similar business interests during our conversations at the Milstein Center. As a result of these meetings, I would come up with my startup idea and present it to other students during the Activation session. In my free time, I'd like to visit Barnard Bookworms, where I would discuss books I read in detail with other club members and have a great time with them.
After finishing my Barnard research, I concluded that Barnard College is a community of brave and enterprising women who are eager to change our world, and I am ready to become a part of it.
