Scholarship / Commercial Law: How will my knowledge and skills to contribute to my country's development? [5]

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Firstly, I intend to use the skills and knowledge gained from my study programme to provide legal advice to the government by working in the government institution. Specifically on the legal framework for commerce system and issues so that the private, public, and foreign sector can easily understand and access it. This is especially important as in Timor-Leste, the legal framework and commerce system is not clear and practical.

Secondly, if I am not given the opportunity to work as a legal advisor in the government, I will establish an agency that focuses on commerce in general and commercial law to give advice to the government as well as the private and public sector about how to set up a legal framework and an effective commerce system through written letter or draft legislation.

Thirdly, if the two above-mentioned options are not available or if I choose to do something different, I will open a law firm and contribute as a private practitioner lawyer who deals with commerce issues to render professional consultation services. Furthermore, I can provide legal opinions and offer my help to the government to draft a commercial legislation.

Lastly, through online digital platforms, I will provide my opinions to the public by writing articles as well as start workshops and seminars to share the knowledge and skills I acquired to others.