maiphuong1806
Jul 29, 2023
Writing Feedback / There have been more consumers using sugary beverages; it could be addressed by some viable measures [7]
@tieuthanh
1, I think you should add more information to this sentence "Simultaneously, it is necessary (...) ease their employees' stress." Like "as a step to ease their employees' stress which can trigger the rise in sugary beverages consumption"
2, " some steps would be taken to reduce it" --> can
3, Moreover I think your solution may not be practical, as even if higher taxes are raised, people still consume it, just with lower frequency. Whereas we want people to stop buying sugary drinks and switch to healthier ones because of health concerns.
@tieuthanh
1, I think you should add more information to this sentence "Simultaneously, it is necessary (...) ease their employees' stress." Like "as a step to ease their employees' stress which can trigger the rise in sugary beverages consumption"
2, " some steps would be taken to reduce it" --> can
3, Moreover I think your solution may not be practical, as even if higher taxes are raised, people still consume it, just with lower frequency. Whereas we want people to stop buying sugary drinks and switch to healthier ones because of health concerns.