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Name: maiphuong
Joined: Jul 29, 2023
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maiphuong1806   
Jul 29, 2023
Writing Feedback / There have been more consumers using sugary beverages; it could be addressed by some viable measures [7]

@tieuthanh
1, I think you should add more information to this sentence "Simultaneously, it is necessary (...) ease their employees' stress." Like "as a step to ease their employees' stress which can trigger the rise in sugary beverages consumption"

2, " some steps would be taken to reduce it" --> can
3, Moreover I think your solution may not be practical, as even if higher taxes are raised, people still consume it, just with lower frequency. Whereas we want people to stop buying sugary drinks and switch to healthier ones because of health concerns.
maiphuong1806   
Jul 29, 2023
Writing Feedback / Is having dinner together important to people? [2]

the advantages of family dinner



the hustle-bustle of everyday life, eating together has become a luxury. Therefore many families choose to rule out that activities from their schedule. Whether this change is positive or negative is still,in fact , under debate.

First, the problem appears to ensue from a matter of time. Parents are off to work from dusk to dawn so they are always pressed for time. Besides working time, children's upbringing and other family-gathering activities contribute to families constantly being on the go / in a hurry. Therefore, spending time cooking meals, as a consequence, is considered another burdensome chore and time-consuming.

However, sitting down together for dinner might help children, especially (those who are ) teenagers or young d adults, reap many benefits. It is vital to notice that having dinner together creates differences in eating habits among teenagers. Under such parents' obligation of more vegetable and fruit intake, or less fast food consumption as well; children can form a healthy diet at a very young age. That leads to weight control at youngsters much easier. Beyond nutritional benefits, dinner time is truly a precious respite for every single family member as it helps them get rid of the day-to-day existence of hassles. Moreover, eating together creates many family dynamics that allow parents to keep a close eye on their children. These supervisions may assist in stopping children suffering from the risk of premature drug abuse or school bullying.

To encapsulate, in my opinion, the advantages of family dinner have outweighed all sorts of hindrances that it creates. People should make the most of their day so as to have enough time for such meaningful and beneficial activities.
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