Undergraduate / "Judge people by their character" - FSU Essay Rough Draft - Mores [5]

I wrote a rough draft for my FSU essay using the Latin word Mores (view prompt). Please tell me what you think. Also, do you think it's too short for a college essay? I can't think of anything else to write.

"Judge people by their character, not by how they look," my mother once told me. I follow that to this day. This saying reflects the Latin word Mores, which refers to character, custom or tradition. I wouldn't want people to judge me on appearance because I'm so much more than that. I want people to see my character; to see how responsible, hardworking and determined I am. Everyday I try to improve my personality and become a better person. My character is reflected by the extracurricular activities I participate in and where I go. I join activities such as National Honor Society and Student Government ; programs with longevity and importance. I don't party or keep company with the wrong crowd because that wouldn't get me anywhere in life. My character influences my everyday life and helps me with moral decisions.

I believe that tradition is the backbone of my family. I remember the day my grandmother taught me how to make the family dish, catamal. I succeeded in making it and also learned something else : to keep traditions alive. Traditions are important in my family and I will pass them on in the future. When I learn a tradition, I feel more connected to my family. It gives me a sense of who I am and where I came from. When I look at my family, I see dedicated, persevering and passionate individuals. My family greatly reflects who I am.