Adrena1998
Mar 12, 2024
Writing Feedback / Task 1 (Pie Chart) About the highest level of education achieved by people over 21 in 2 countries. [2]
The pie chart depicts the level of education reached by adults in 2 different countries
Overall, it is clear that adults in both countries A and B got 4 distinct educational levels, such as University, vocational/technology school, no schooling, primary and secondary school. The levels of education achieved were various for each country.
In country A, most adults had at least several schooling. Only five percent of the mature people had not gone to school at all, and merely 15 of the adults stopped studying at primary school. The biggest piece in the pie chart of country A is the section of people who ended their studies at secondary school, at 45%. Followed by, thirty percent of adults who completed vocational/technology school. A tiny part of the population, 5%, got university degrees.
In country B, more grown people got higher educational levels than that in country A. Five percent had no schooling. Another five percent of adults discontinued their studies after the primary. There was 35% of people over the age of 21 quitted studying at secondary. The figure for vocational/technology institutions was 30%. The proportion of people who graduated from university accounted for a quarter of the pie chart, which was higher than that in country A. ]
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The pie chart depicts the level of education reached by adults in 2 different countries
Overall, it is clear that adults in both countries A and B got 4 distinct educational levels, such as University, vocational/technology school, no schooling, primary and secondary school. The levels of education achieved were various for each country.
In country A, most adults had at least several schooling. Only five percent of the mature people had not gone to school at all, and merely 15 of the adults stopped studying at primary school. The biggest piece in the pie chart of country A is the section of people who ended their studies at secondary school, at 45%. Followed by, thirty percent of adults who completed vocational/technology school. A tiny part of the population, 5%, got university degrees.
In country B, more grown people got higher educational levels than that in country A. Five percent had no schooling. Another five percent of adults discontinued their studies after the primary. There was 35% of people over the age of 21 quitted studying at secondary. The figure for vocational/technology institutions was 30%. The proportion of people who graduated from university accounted for a quarter of the pie chart, which was higher than that in country A. ]
Please revise my essay! Thanks !!!
How many points do I get according to the IELTS Criteria?
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