Graduate / I need broaden and develop my scientific background to become an international-level researcher [4]

Hello everybody...

I have been trying to put together some ideas for my SOP...and I have gotta say it was not easy...
whenever I tried to put the ideas into words, it just didn't work...I tried to check other SOPs on the web to find anything that might be suitable to express my case...well..at the end this is what I ended up with...I would appreciate reviewing and critics...Many thanks in advance.

P.S.:for privacy reasons, I have deleted some of the info within
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Statement of Purpose
I am writing this statement to apply for .... PhD program at .... University for the summer of 2010.

My main academic goal in pursuing a PhD degree is to broaden and develop my scientific background to allow me to become an international-level researcher with highly specialized knowledge and expertise in the field of Computational Sciences. I feel that graduate study at ... will be the most logical extension of my academic pursuits and a major step towards achieving my goal.

Motivation

"Education is the passport to the future, for tomorrow belongs to those who prepare for it today"... Malcolm X

I truly feel that the greatest contribution that I would be able to make to society in the future would be to distinguish myself in the area of Computational Engineering.

Inspired by my Professors and Doctor Engineers who graduated from Germany during my BSc. in Mechanical Engineering at the University of ...., I was very interested to pursue my master studies in Germany. After a great effort of searching for an interesting future field of engineering, I decided to study Computational engineering. I truly believe that this decision was the highlight to a whole new and remarkable turn in my career.

Background

"Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure."... Maryanne Williamson

I completed my Master of Science in Computational Engineering in November, 2006 with a minor in Machine elements and conveying techniques from Ruhr-University of Bochum. As part of the requirements for this degree, I focused on the major courses: Finite element method (linear, static and dynamic), Mechanics (Continuum, Fluid, and solid), Numerical Methods in dynamics, and Design Optimization. My master thesis was a part of a research and development project of the company Bornemann, through which I was able to develop my experience in the finite element analysis software ANSYS. This experience groomed by theoretical knowledge attained during my Master studies enabled me later on to work on other analysis softwares like Abaqus and Nastran.

Upon completion of my master studies, I was very lucky to be accepted in a 3-month training program in Kïln at Tecosim GmbH -an engineering company with specialist expertise in Computer Aided Engineering (CAE) - that was my first real experience in an industrial environment. At the end of my training, I was hired as a full-time Computational engineer in the Static and Dynamic department where I have had the opportunity to work independently on many Finite Element Analysis projects such as:

-Thermal analysis of an exhaust manifold for FORD research and development center.
-NVH analysis of multiple KMT Gearboxes for Gertag Ford Transmission (GFT).

Unfortunately, due to private reasons I had to resign my position at Tecosim GmbH and fly back to .... Nevertheless, my short term stay in this very competitive environment has given me invaluable practical experience and has demonstrated that I am a fast learner and that I cope well with pressure and specific deadlines as can be seen in the work certificate that I was granted.

am currently working for SL-Rasch GmbH a company specialized in special buildings and light weight structures and one of the leaders in this field. The project in which I am currently involved as a quality control engineer is the shading of ...where large foldable umbrella structures are being installed in an overlapping arrangement to cover an area of approx. ...

At SL-Rasch GmbH, I had the chance to get a closer look to the reflection of the FEA and CFD performed through SL-Rasch for the umbrella structures on solid ground.

As my CV indicates, I have worked in several Mechanical oriented companies. I think that this professional experience in the industry is a big plus for me to succeed in my PhD, because I have acquired a set of very important "soft" abilities, crucial when it comes to work in business environments, but also very important in academic and research activities; since a close collaboration and a great bond between the industry and research institutes exits, especially in Germany.

I am now ready to further expand my own knowledge and experience in an academic setting and I am well aware of the considerable dedication, commitment and focus required to earn a doctorate degree. However, I care significantly about the discipline I have chosen and I know that I am consistent and able to commit to a difficult task for a long time.

Finally, I hope that my background and qualifications are found suitable for the ... PhD program at ... University. I look forward to a rewarding association with ....University.