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Sep 11, 2024

Writing Feedback / [WRITING TASK 1] the number of enquiries in one city over a six months [5]

I suggest a new overall to make your essay more interesting, you could write:
Overall, the number of inquiries that were done in person and by telephone witnessed an upward trend, while the opposite was true for letters during the studied year. Moreover, in-person inquiries were the most favored by residents in comparison with other options.

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Sep 11, 2024

Writing Feedback / Ielts writing task 1: the water usage [2]

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world. Summarise the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The given charts provide information about the use of water in San Diego, California, and the remaining nations in the world.
Overall, water is mainly used by residents in both San Diego and California while the opposite is true in the rest of the world, where agriculture accounts for the majority of the water usage. Additionally, the figures for Industry are relatively the same in all charts.
Turning to the details, Residential activities is the dominant of San Diego's water usage, with 60%. Following that, the figure for California constitutes approximately two-fifths of the overall, which is five times as high as the other countries. By contrast, a significant amount of water is used for agriculture in the remaining nations, as opposed to only 28% and 17% in California and San Diego respectively.
Moreover, a third of the water used is generated from Industry in California. Meanwhile, other countries involved in San Diego, have the Industry sector standing at the second position of water usage, with 23%