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Name: Hà Phương Linh
Joined: Oct 1, 2024
Last Post: Oct 3, 2024
Threads: 3
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From: Viet Nam
School: Le Quy Don - Dong Da High School

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halinhislearning   
Oct 3, 2024
Writing Feedback / Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment [3]

Nowadays, humans are the culprits of numerous environmental issues. However, we can still take steps to mitigate the damage we have caused to the Earth. This essay will discuss some noteworthy ecological problems and solutions governments and individuals can use to tackle these problems.
One of the biggest environmental problems humans have caused is air pollution. Gas emissions from individual vehicles and factories lead to global warming and greenhouse effects. This can have a devastating influence on the environment. Another issue is that living and manufacturing waste disposal is not being carried out properly due to the increasing population. Consequently, they pollute the water resources and soils.
However, humans can take measures to address these problems. Governments need to introduce laws with a view to limiting gas emissions from factories and vehicles. Moreover, they should encourage companies and people to use renewable energy daily. Advertisements about public transport, zero-waste products, and electric cars are excellent for promoting people's usage of environmentally friendly things. Additionally, individuals can pursue green living, in which they use fewer plastic products, avoid overconsumption, and support environmentally friendly companies. The habit of reusing, recycling, and reducing is a great one to start. There is no need for being perfect from the start, trying your best is the most crucial.
In conclusion, humans are indeed responsible for a variety of environmental issues. Therefore, governments and individuals must take part in taking care of the environment.
halinhislearning   
Oct 3, 2024
Writing Feedback / Why do we need music? Is a country's traditional music more important than international music [5]

Hi I think that the sentence "Asian conventional styles still keep outdated lyrics that are more sexual than accepted in a modern world" is more supporting to the idea "Is a country's traditional music more important than international music" than your opinions in the essay.
"To be more precise, students under 15 should be not allowed to listen to lyrics containing words such as fuck or bitch". I think this sentence should be soften. For example, you can use "Some songs contain inappropriated lyrics which are unsuitable for student under 15."
halinhislearning   
Oct 2, 2024
Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1 - PROCESS - How drinking water is made using solar power. [4]

- The topic:"The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant."
- The essay:
"The illustrative drawing demonstrates the production of drinking water using power for solar.
In general, there are six stages included in the process. It begins with the light from the sun absorbed by the solar panel and the last stage is to package drinking water in a moveable container.
The first step is to use solar panels to absorb the sunlight. Subsequently, the energy is converted into a converter. The process continues with the stage when the converted energy is used to generate a pump in an underground well.
In the next step, the water in the underground well is pumped into a water tank on a wooden platform. In the water tank, there is a smaller one to treat the water so the water in the underground well is purified into drinking water. The last stage of the process is transmitting the drinking water into a moveable container by opening a tap."



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halinhislearning   
Oct 2, 2024
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Discuss both views for high salaries [3]

@ptt513
Hi, I think you should change the phrase "numerous of teenager usually are under peer pressure" into "numberous teenagers often face peer presure" and "leads to they cannot concern more about being in relationship and getting married" into "prevent them from focusing on relationship and getting married".
halinhislearning   
Oct 1, 2024
Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1 - PROCESS - THE PRODUCTION OF BEER [2]

- The topic:
The diagram below shows the various stage involved in the production of beer.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
- The essay:
The picture below illustrates the various steps of the beer production.
In general, there are eleven stages involved in the process. The first stage in the process is milling the malted barley. The process finishes with packaging the final product.
Firstly, malted barley goes through the milling stage. Subsequently, it is mashed with water in a tank. The liquid is lautered in a special tank, producing lautered liquid and spent grain for feeding of animals in the following stage. In the next step, the liquid has to be boiled with sugar and hops. Next, it is mixed in the whirlpool before going through cooling process.
Subsequently, the cooled liquid is fermented by adding yeast and carbon dioxide.Then, the fermented beer goes through maturing process in storage tanks. In the following stage, the matured beer goes through filtering process. Lastly, the final products are packaged in bottles or barrels or deliveried by trucks.



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