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Name: Ambica
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Undergraduate / Hardworking, motivated and caring - University of BC Personal Profile [3]

Interesting essay but I think that this could be more engaging with some changes. First, I think that starting off with "hardworking, motivated, and caring" is pretty basic/generic. So it might be more beneficial to tell a specific story that shows these qualities you have. You could start off with an example from IT Club or your journey to get good grades. Secondly, the part about your academic accomplishments is good, but you should focus more on how it connects to who you are. Like why are those grades important to you? Adding this kind of context can make it more meaningful. Also, talk more about details regarding IT club, instead of talking about general arguments and and teamwork be more specific on a certain problem and how you contributed to solving it. And lastly, for the ending it seems a little rushed so talk more about why comp sci excites you and how your experiences have made you ready for UBC. Good luck!
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1 day ago
Undergraduate / Varsity basketball team (responding to a problem) - UBC SAUDER SCHOOL OF BUSINESS [2]

Question: Explain how you responded to a problem and/or an unfamiliar situation. What did you do, what was the outcome, and what did you learn from the experience? (maximum 1500 characters)

Some athletes get awarded MVP, others make the game-winning basket; I've got a gold medal in sabotaging my own teammates. As captain of our varsity basketball team, I've had my fair share of airballs, both on and off court. This year, we had two grade nines join our team, both of whom had difficulty learning the plays. During one practice, they kept running the wrong routes: dribble, misstep, turnover. A couple of those in a game, and we'd be down by 20. As our season opener loomed closer, my instincts took over, and I corrected every wrong move like I was filming a how-to basketball video. I thought I was fixing the issue, but instead, I watched one of the girls cross her arms and mutter, "We get it." Translation: You're embarrassing us. In trying to fix the problem, I'd inadvertently put a spotlight on their struggle. Way to go captain, really crushing it. No, literally, crushing self-esteem. After practice, I apologized privately to them and organized a session where we ran through each play in a one-on-one setting. This time, I focused on building their confidence instead of just correcting their mistakes. Rather than "fixing," I focused on facilitating their progress. Just like that, we won our first game 56 to 41. Since then, I've reframed how I approach challenges as a leader in any setting. Leadership isn't about controlling the game; it's about empowering your team to play it better. And sometimes, that means sitting on the sidelines and letting them take the shot.
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