Emonaperl
Nov 25, 2009
Undergraduate / 'I was a corpulent teenager' - UC Personal Statement #1 - Describe your World [4]
Any suggestions, critiques, or comments are greatly appreciated.
Prompt 1: Describe the world you come from ï for example, your family, community or school ï and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Within myself I feel as if certain energies both ooze out of and surge into my core. Flowing toward vital organs are support and acceptance while autonomous perseverance glow from my shoulders. I call earlier fortitude and the latter willpower. My family and friends provide an understandable encouragement for the decisions I make. One may contemplate why an Iranian Muslim mother and an American Jewish father would accept me, their child, becoming Christian. I cannot pinpoint the reason except that they exert their force onto me.
Looking through photographs from two years ago one can see what used to be meïa corpulent teenager. Flipping through more photos shows a triumphant transformation of what semblance I currently holdïa lean senior. Those old pictures represent the motivation, desire, and dream that enabled me to lose the weight. I told my fit friend that the time came to tone my flesh into brawn. He acknowledged my decision and contributed not only the proper diet and exercise but the overall blueprint for what I aimed to achieve. From the appropriate adjustments in daily routines stemmed the birth of a person who now earned confidence, courage, and one of the most significant of characteristics.
Initiative possibly became, pardon me, became my middle name. Monday through Thursday after school, I felt as if I was an entrepreneur while I tutored mathematics. Lacking a teaching credential, I sat in with the underclassmen or the customers and quickly recalled upon the geometric, algebraic, trigonometric, or pre-calculus topics of previous years. Next I applied various methods of teaching for the way in which they gained an optimal comprehension. Whether they grasped a topic best by drawing a picture to model a situation, explaining using verbatim on how to approach a particular problem, or walking them through it step by step. Tutoring enlightened me and aspiration bloomed. I cannot fathom when I am old enough to be a mentor and father.
From all the previous qualitiesïthe zeal of fortitude and willpower, the gained confidence and courage, and now initiativeïI formulated the next, according to Erik Erikson's Psychosocial Stages, five stepping stones of my life. Identity: I plan to earn a degree in Biochemistry and become an Oral Surgeon. Intimacy: As the majority of males, find a partner and grow a family. Generativity: To teach not only my children, but my grandchildren many of the attributes I have. Most importantly, I want to keep up with my exercising so that giving up the popular pastime of throwing and catching will not be an option. Integrity: With this vision, I will be able to look back on my past, through all the growth and changes, through all the joy and adversity, through all the relationshipsïboth good and badïso that I can bestow the energies of fortitude and willpower on society for when the time comes, I will be ready to pass.
Any suggestions, critiques, or comments are greatly appreciated.
Prompt 1: Describe the world you come from ï for example, your family, community or school ï and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Within myself I feel as if certain energies both ooze out of and surge into my core. Flowing toward vital organs are support and acceptance while autonomous perseverance glow from my shoulders. I call earlier fortitude and the latter willpower. My family and friends provide an understandable encouragement for the decisions I make. One may contemplate why an Iranian Muslim mother and an American Jewish father would accept me, their child, becoming Christian. I cannot pinpoint the reason except that they exert their force onto me.
Looking through photographs from two years ago one can see what used to be meïa corpulent teenager. Flipping through more photos shows a triumphant transformation of what semblance I currently holdïa lean senior. Those old pictures represent the motivation, desire, and dream that enabled me to lose the weight. I told my fit friend that the time came to tone my flesh into brawn. He acknowledged my decision and contributed not only the proper diet and exercise but the overall blueprint for what I aimed to achieve. From the appropriate adjustments in daily routines stemmed the birth of a person who now earned confidence, courage, and one of the most significant of characteristics.
Initiative possibly became, pardon me, became my middle name. Monday through Thursday after school, I felt as if I was an entrepreneur while I tutored mathematics. Lacking a teaching credential, I sat in with the underclassmen or the customers and quickly recalled upon the geometric, algebraic, trigonometric, or pre-calculus topics of previous years. Next I applied various methods of teaching for the way in which they gained an optimal comprehension. Whether they grasped a topic best by drawing a picture to model a situation, explaining using verbatim on how to approach a particular problem, or walking them through it step by step. Tutoring enlightened me and aspiration bloomed. I cannot fathom when I am old enough to be a mentor and father.
From all the previous qualitiesïthe zeal of fortitude and willpower, the gained confidence and courage, and now initiativeïI formulated the next, according to Erik Erikson's Psychosocial Stages, five stepping stones of my life. Identity: I plan to earn a degree in Biochemistry and become an Oral Surgeon. Intimacy: As the majority of males, find a partner and grow a family. Generativity: To teach not only my children, but my grandchildren many of the attributes I have. Most importantly, I want to keep up with my exercising so that giving up the popular pastime of throwing and catching will not be an option. Integrity: With this vision, I will be able to look back on my past, through all the growth and changes, through all the joy and adversity, through all the relationshipsïboth good and badïso that I can bestow the energies of fortitude and willpower on society for when the time comes, I will be ready to pass.
