Undergraduate / I have taken many journeys devoid ; Carnegie Mellon- Why?/ Major [8]

hey guys this is my Carnegie Mellon essay i would like to know what you guys think
Please submit a one-page, single-spaced essay that explains why you have chosen Carnegie Mellon your particular major(s), department(s) or program(s). This essay should include the reasons why you've chosen the major(s), any goals or relevant work plans and any other information you would like us to know. If you are applying to more than one college or program, please mention each college or program you are applying to. Because our admission committees review applicants by college and programs, your essay can impact our final decision. Please do not exceed one page for this essay.

Why Carnegie Mellon?

I have taken many journeys devoid of which I would not have experienced essential truths. My father started us off early while other children played with their Barbie doll and play stations, we would sit at home and solve puzzles because my father believes that critical thinking is the first part of success. with eight siblings, my dad felt the need to take us on many journeys and those trips were2 to help us understand that true knowledge comes not only from the walls of your class room but extends to your experience and ability to have social interactions with people . As person of African heritage who grew up in Nigeria, The value of achieving success academically and as an individual has become more stressed. At the early age of 10, I started to make an outline of what I wanted to achieve academically and also started looking at different avenues to integrate new ideas into my father's business. As someone That is interested in business and economics, Carnegie offers me the opportunity to purist both at Tepper school and school of humanities the jointly awarded economic degree. been able to learn at both colleges will give me the opportunity to get a better all round understanding of business. Drawing connections between subjects is very important to me. Hopefully having a holistic view would enhance my critical thinking

As a student who believes in mixing different areas of education ,Carnegie offers me the greatest opportunity to do that, with virtually every program nationally top ranked the ability to diversify the education received is invaluable. my desire to incorporate science into business is a major reason why I think Carnegie Mellon is the place for me

There are many advantages of going to school at Carnegie Mello . Carnegie Mellon University educated some of the brightest minds of our time from Charles Wilson (former CEO of GM) to James Gosling (creator of JAVA programming) which represent the extensive knowledge and support of the faculty at Carnegie Mellon. From the wealth of research opportunities and internships available at Carnegie Mellon, every one of their students is able to leave a lasting impression on the world.

Finally, I have chosen Carnegie Mellon because of the innumerable of opportunities available to participate in various forms of student activities. Given my interest and experience in community service, environment and student leadership ranging back to the "FOOD FOR ALL DRIVE", which I organize annually on the 25th of December to feed the less fortunate I also intend to engage myself in the student council and the Carnegie Mellon and other student led activities

Therefore, with these reasons and intentions in mind, it is hard not to think that Carnegie Mellon is my ideal university choice.