Undergraduate / Why Colby, an earth-friendly college [6]

fix the opening. it's neither intriguing nor productive. the school knows how much they rock
kthxbye

Graduate / Statement of Purpose for Grad School in Anthropology; 'Martin Luther King, Jr' [5]

never end with "Thank you for your time and attention to my application for master's studies of anthropology at the University of XXXXX. I appreciate your generous and kind consideration of my application, and I look forward to being in touch with you soon."

it's an essay, not an interview for a job