samisglam
Jan 13, 2010
samisglam
Jan 2, 2010
Undergraduate / Summer of books and literature - Texas A&M essay topic A [5]
I feel limited right now and i have zero inspiration and creativity. thus this stringy, choppy, and horrible essay. :[ i need some constructive critism, and fast. please let me know what you think.
Topic: Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you.
It is always the simplest things in life which leave a huge imprint upon our lives. This can be a sincere smile, an innocent nod or perhaps even a guileless conversation. Whatever the reason, it usually makes us a better person. When I was 16 I met a person who made a huge impact upon my life. It would be understandable if I said that this person was a noble peace prize winner, or a well known humanitarian, but that would be a lie. However I am not a liar, just a girl who has realized that even the smallest person can make a difference in your life. The truth is that the person who impacted me was a little 14 year old girl.
This girl was someone I met at the park. Over the summer going to the park became somewhat of a ritual for me, and at 6 o'clock sharp I would be at the community park with either a book or my ipod. Those were the days when I was free from worry, and the anguish which usually occupies my brain. One day I was just sitting reading The Perks of Being a Wallflower when a pre-teen girl sat down next to me. I thought to myself, "I hope she doesn't start bothering me", however little did I know that this girl, who I had just rudely judged was going to influence me to a great degree.
"You know that book is a really good book", were the first words out of her mouth. I nodded and pretended to read on. "There is a line in there that goes like 'I feel infinite' it a great line. And it really makes you think, like how could that be? No one can ever be infinite. But if you really really look at it, its true." She looked at me a smiled. I remember I had closed my book by then. I stared at her and thought, what would a pre-teen know about life? "My name is Taylor by the way" she explained sticking her hand out. I smiled and shook it knowing that this was the start of something infinite.
That summer, or to be more exact, whatever was left of the summer, we bonded over books and literature. She was only 14 but had a mature knowledge of a 20 year old. It was fascinating to know that someone so young could be so determined and ready to push towards success. It inspired me to become a better student, a better person and made me even more determined to achieve my own goals. I didn't really see Taylor after that summer but when I left Toronto I knew that my motivation and determination came from her. She taught me that it was never too late to achieve what I wanted and no matter what always reach out for success. If you don't succeed entirely at least you will learn something from it. Perhaps if that 'annoying pre-teen' girl hadn't sat down next to me, I wouldn't be who I am today.
I feel limited right now and i have zero inspiration and creativity. thus this stringy, choppy, and horrible essay. :[ i need some constructive critism, and fast. please let me know what you think.
Topic: Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you.
It is always the simplest things in life which leave a huge imprint upon our lives. This can be a sincere smile, an innocent nod or perhaps even a guileless conversation. Whatever the reason, it usually makes us a better person. When I was 16 I met a person who made a huge impact upon my life. It would be understandable if I said that this person was a noble peace prize winner, or a well known humanitarian, but that would be a lie. However I am not a liar, just a girl who has realized that even the smallest person can make a difference in your life. The truth is that the person who impacted me was a little 14 year old girl.
This girl was someone I met at the park. Over the summer going to the park became somewhat of a ritual for me, and at 6 o'clock sharp I would be at the community park with either a book or my ipod. Those were the days when I was free from worry, and the anguish which usually occupies my brain. One day I was just sitting reading The Perks of Being a Wallflower when a pre-teen girl sat down next to me. I thought to myself, "I hope she doesn't start bothering me", however little did I know that this girl, who I had just rudely judged was going to influence me to a great degree.
"You know that book is a really good book", were the first words out of her mouth. I nodded and pretended to read on. "There is a line in there that goes like 'I feel infinite' it a great line. And it really makes you think, like how could that be? No one can ever be infinite. But if you really really look at it, its true." She looked at me a smiled. I remember I had closed my book by then. I stared at her and thought, what would a pre-teen know about life? "My name is Taylor by the way" she explained sticking her hand out. I smiled and shook it knowing that this was the start of something infinite.
That summer, or to be more exact, whatever was left of the summer, we bonded over books and literature. She was only 14 but had a mature knowledge of a 20 year old. It was fascinating to know that someone so young could be so determined and ready to push towards success. It inspired me to become a better student, a better person and made me even more determined to achieve my own goals. I didn't really see Taylor after that summer but when I left Toronto I knew that my motivation and determination came from her. She taught me that it was never too late to achieve what I wanted and no matter what always reach out for success. If you don't succeed entirely at least you will learn something from it. Perhaps if that 'annoying pre-teen' girl hadn't sat down next to me, I wouldn't be who I am today.
samisglam
Jan 2, 2010
Undergraduate / NYU (summer in Italy, new yorker - Alicia Keys, poem, movie, program of interest [6]
i think your personality really shines through these prompts. the poem is a bit different from what most nyu ads expect (its rhymes too much) but from the poem i understand your passions and who you are as a person.
i know it is past the fall 2010 deadline but i just wanted to let you know that this is really good.
i think your personality really shines through these prompts. the poem is a bit different from what most nyu ads expect (its rhymes too much) but from the poem i understand your passions and who you are as a person.
i know it is past the fall 2010 deadline but i just wanted to let you know that this is really good.
samisglam
Jan 2, 2010
Undergraduate / Portrait of a Muse. NYU Supplement - Movie of your life [6]
this is good. i had a hard time with this question. i am assuming the artist is you? why would you choose such a high age? are to depicting yourself in the future? anyway good luck with the application.
this is good. i had a hard time with this question. i am assuming the artist is you? why would you choose such a high age? are to depicting yourself in the future? anyway good luck with the application.
samisglam
Dec 15, 2009
Undergraduate / Spend a day, Poem, 2050 Movie, The program - nyu supplement [11]
i am talking about this truffle en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chocolate_truffle another example would the the ferro rocher candy.
i do see that you have quite a few good points. its always great to see things from another persons perspective. thanks. :].
i am talking about this truffle en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chocolate_truffle another example would the the ferro rocher candy.
i do see that you have quite a few good points. its always great to see things from another persons perspective. thanks. :].
samisglam
Dec 15, 2009
Undergraduate / Spend a day, Poem, 2050 Movie, The program - nyu supplement [11]
omgg. thanks, see this is the constructive criticism that i needed. yes, when i was writing I did notice the "love" thing but I was in such a hurry I dint change it. Umm yeah the 4 problem. I'll fix that as well.
The future... I didn't think of that. I was just thinking about how I would be. Not my surroundings however I guess that can be true. I was skimming through the other answers and they never mentioned anything about the future itself, so it never crossed my mind. But thats a very good point.
Hmpf.. writing. What do you think I should use instead? Should I just cross out that whole part?
omgg. thanks, see this is the constructive criticism that i needed. yes, when i was writing I did notice the "love" thing but I was in such a hurry I dint change it. Umm yeah the 4 problem. I'll fix that as well.
The future... I didn't think of that. I was just thinking about how I would be. Not my surroundings however I guess that can be true. I was skimming through the other answers and they never mentioned anything about the future itself, so it never crossed my mind. But thats a very good point.
Hmpf.. writing. What do you think I should use instead? Should I just cross out that whole part?
samisglam
Dec 13, 2009
Undergraduate / Spend a day, Poem, 2050 Movie, The program - nyu supplement [11]
so i just want someone to look this over. i am thinking of applying for nyu and this is what i came up with so far.
A. SPEND A DAY
i am having problems with this one. but i was thinking about a trench coat, rain, new york and audery hepburn
B. POEM
The delights and layers of a truffle
A truffle in comparison
I am different from the rest
A hard nut floating in this complicated world
A companion for your hard times
Dark, light, crunchy, every layer is me
Every layer reveals a different me
Every layer defines another me
Every layer is packed attached, incomplete with the rest of me
C. 2050 MOVIE
The Lipstick Memoirs of a Nocturnal Glamazon
The scenes of the movie will start during the night and will be illustrated through the dairy pages of a nocturnal girl. She thinks she has got life figured out and is ready to leap into the next stage of her life. However through the events which occur during her senior year she comes to the realization that not only is she not ready, but she is afraid of the future. Then one cold snow night, in her balcony, she realizes that all of her life all she wanted to do was grow up and be mature. She took responsibility, acted mature and loved being older then she really was. However as realization washes over her, she comes to the conclusion, that while she was chasing maturity she lost her childhood. She became ignorant of those sweet memories during those sunny days and those jumps in the puddles on rainy days. As she accepts this she transits into the next phase of her life and continues onward. With those ephemeral happy moments in her heart she grows up to become a successful writer who becomes well known for saying "hold on to your inner child, because the moments during childhood are the happiest ones and has the qualities those similar to a shooting star. Fleeting, brilliant and spectacular"
D. THE PROGRAM
Writing. Writing words. Writing stories. Writing articles. Writing in general pleases me. I have loved to write since I was a young child. I remember going into my fathers library one day and looking at the books with appreciation, love and respect. And though I was only 4 a love within my heart was ignited for writing. However it took me a few years before I recognized this love. And in order to make this love more complete and absolute I decided that I must become a writer. Being part of NYU's Creative writing program will enable me to stretch my boundaries as a self proclaimed writer. It will expose me to a wonderful city which is intriguing, inspiring and more fascinating then anything I have ever come across.
so i just want someone to look this over. i am thinking of applying for nyu and this is what i came up with so far.
A. SPEND A DAY
i am having problems with this one. but i was thinking about a trench coat, rain, new york and audery hepburn
B. POEM
The delights and layers of a truffle
A truffle in comparison
I am different from the rest
A hard nut floating in this complicated world
A companion for your hard times
Dark, light, crunchy, every layer is me
Every layer reveals a different me
Every layer defines another me
Every layer is packed attached, incomplete with the rest of me
C. 2050 MOVIE
The Lipstick Memoirs of a Nocturnal Glamazon
The scenes of the movie will start during the night and will be illustrated through the dairy pages of a nocturnal girl. She thinks she has got life figured out and is ready to leap into the next stage of her life. However through the events which occur during her senior year she comes to the realization that not only is she not ready, but she is afraid of the future. Then one cold snow night, in her balcony, she realizes that all of her life all she wanted to do was grow up and be mature. She took responsibility, acted mature and loved being older then she really was. However as realization washes over her, she comes to the conclusion, that while she was chasing maturity she lost her childhood. She became ignorant of those sweet memories during those sunny days and those jumps in the puddles on rainy days. As she accepts this she transits into the next phase of her life and continues onward. With those ephemeral happy moments in her heart she grows up to become a successful writer who becomes well known for saying "hold on to your inner child, because the moments during childhood are the happiest ones and has the qualities those similar to a shooting star. Fleeting, brilliant and spectacular"
D. THE PROGRAM
Writing. Writing words. Writing stories. Writing articles. Writing in general pleases me. I have loved to write since I was a young child. I remember going into my fathers library one day and looking at the books with appreciation, love and respect. And though I was only 4 a love within my heart was ignited for writing. However it took me a few years before I recognized this love. And in order to make this love more complete and absolute I decided that I must become a writer. Being part of NYU's Creative writing program will enable me to stretch my boundaries as a self proclaimed writer. It will expose me to a wonderful city which is intriguing, inspiring and more fascinating then anything I have ever come across.