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smileypeace10

Dec 18, 2009

Undergraduate / Best piece of advice: "never, never, never give up" (Eleanor Roosevelt) [4]

I'm trying to say that the advice has been given directly by my mother and indirectly through authors and succesful people.

The advice my mother has given me goes along the line of the first quote listed. The second quote is from a calendar and people have said indirectly that you should never give up.

I included the first quote because encompasses the advice my mother has given me about seeking opportunities to enrich myself.

Should I simply include the first quote?

Thanks

smileypeace10

Dec 17, 2009

Undergraduate / Experience, Famous New Yorker, Limerick - NYU Supplement [9]

"and now it's her choice,
to let the world hear her loud yell."

It says hear "her yell loud." Did you mean to say "hear her yell loud?"

You should consider both choices because each has a slightly different meaning. I think the way you wrote it has a more powerful meaning because anyone can yell loud. It seems you are trying to convey the notion that your voice and self expression have transformed and become more powerful, more forceful and defined.

I would suggest that it remain "her loud yell"- I just wanted to make you aware of the alternative

smileypeace10

Dec 17, 2009

Undergraduate / Experience, Famous New Yorker, Limerick - NYU Supplement [9]

I prefer the limerick because it describes you as a complete person- IN DIFFERENT AREAS.

smileypeace10

Dec 17, 2009

Undergraduate / An Intellectual Experience:Stanford Short Essay [8]

"It is to this questions"

It should be "It is to these questions..."

smileypeace10

Dec 17, 2009

Undergraduate / Best piece of advice: "never, never, never give up" (Eleanor Roosevelt) [4]

The greatest piece of advice I have ever been given still rings through my head every so often. It speaks through that little feeling inside of me, it lingers at the pit of my stomach or on the surface of my heart. It flows out from my mother like a whisper that needs to be repeated and is, on those type of days that we all experience. These important code of words have been transcribed in books by the benevolent and spoken on some interviews on television. It has been repeated by those wise persons who have stepped before us and those who step along side us, wishing and hoping for us to do our best. I try to wear it on my sleeve at those critical points when I need to follow it most. : "Each of us has much more hidden inside us than we have had a chance to explore. Unless we create an environment that enables us to discover the limits of our potential, we will never know what we have inside of us" (Mahammad Yunus) which is why we must, "never, never, never give up."(Eleanor Roosevelt)

The message is a note worthy one: to reach the limits of our potential and flourish as human beings, we must challenge our limits and seek opportunities to enrich ourselves intellectually, socially and mentally.

In the tenth grade, I realized that my school was not presenting the intellectual challenges I needed to flourish. That March, my local newspaper, El Correo, featured an advertisement about a new school opening-Bree HS Early Career Quell.After learning about the Bard mission and approach to learning, I eagerly filled out an application, took an assesment and went for an interview.

I was ready to take on the challenge of college courses, At Bree I would encounter even more rigorous work than what I was undertaking in honors classes; still, I felt the experience would be worthwhile.I decided transferring to Bard would be an amazing opportunity for me to gain exposure to college, learn at a higher caliber and further develop intellectually.

The greatest piece of advice I have ever been given has served as a special ingredient in the recipe for success. For me, it has been the compass that will guide me to continued success and reassures me that I have yet to reach(be ) my best or that I am capable of leading the rest.