Nahaly
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / "a tall, lanky Indian boy" - Stanford Supplement: Roomate Essay [5]
I like you already!
I think the second paragraph may be unnecessary. Maybe if you highlighted why being competitive is important to you it would help. And I agree, the conclusion could be a bit more specific. The third paragraph is the one I find most insightful so maybe work on that one.
That's all and good luck!
I like you already!
I think the second paragraph may be unnecessary. Maybe if you highlighted why being competitive is important to you it would help. And I agree, the conclusion could be a bit more specific. The third paragraph is the one I find most insightful so maybe work on that one.
That's all and good luck!