Undergraduate / Claremont McKenna "Leaders in the Making" Warren Buffet-Feedback [5]

I need all help that I can get writing this paper. I will NOT be offended, so say whatever you want/need to say. All criticism will be appreciated! Thank you so much!

Personally, I believe a leader is someone who thinks and acts against conventionality in order to ensure the wellbeing of the people who depend on him or her. Many say that leadership is an attribute that cannot be taught or learned: leaders are born with the personality and talent that makes others want to emulate them. Others believe that we all have the ability to attain leadership skills, and that it is every individual's responsibility to use these talents when called upon to contribute to society. Warren Buffett, one of the most successful business executives this world has ever known, once said, "Someone's sitting in the shade today because someone planted a tree a long time ago." As one of the most successful business moguls of all time, Buffett has planted more than his share of trees. Warren Buffett is recognized not only for his achievements in the business community, but also for his grand contributions to our society as well.

Economically, Warren Buffett can be held accountable for the success of thousands of small businesses across the United States. In combined effort with Goldman Sachs earlier this year, Buffett was involved in the investment of roughly $500 million in scholarships dedicated to furthering the education of small business owners. This commitment to assure the success of the common man clearly demonstrates Warren Buffett's dedication to the community.

Along with his monetary contributions, Warren Buffett has also advanced our society in a political sense. As an advisor to the Board of Directors of the Nuclear Threat Initiative, Buffett has pledged nearly $50 million in a coalition against the use of nuclear, biological, and chemical weapons. Alongside other influential leaders in the science and business community, Buffett has been involved in the disposal of great amounts of nuclear materials. In addition to his work with the NTI, Buffett is arguably the most philanthropic person in history. In June of 2006, Buffett donated approximately $30 billion worth of Berkshire Hathaway Class B shares to the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation. This donation was the largest in history, assuring his lifelong commitment to help the less fortunate.

As a society, we recognize Warren Buffet for his economic success, and also for the many philanthropic contributions to the community. As an industrialist, Buffett has always been a key figure in the humanitarian community. It is people like Buffett who use their multi faceted abilities to benefit society that inspire me to become a "leader in the making" at Claremont McKenna College.

Once again, ANY AND ALL help would greatly appreciated. I procrastinated (big mistake), and now have only a few days before this is due.

Thank you so much in advance!