jcelniker13
Dec 30, 2009
Undergraduate / Lafayette - intellectual or creative interest or accomplishment [6]
"Intrigued how much a decision can change face of the whole nation, I started reading more and more, transforming a mere curiosity about economics into the love of my life."
the beginning of the sentence is awkward and probably in passive voice. maybe try:
I started reading more and more, and soon my intrigue of how greatly one decision can affect a nation transformed a mere ...
"Intrigued how much a decision can change face of the whole nation, I started reading more and more, transforming a mere curiosity about economics into the love of my life."
the beginning of the sentence is awkward and probably in passive voice. maybe try:
I started reading more and more, and soon my intrigue of how greatly one decision can affect a nation transformed a mere ...