Undergraduate / Death by Play-Dough + Acceptance Through Dance - Common App [7]

I agree the first one is interesting and is unique whereas the 2nd is more of a generic (abt diverse cultures). I also loved the first line of "Death..." :)

But you should definitely condense some parts, may be from the 1st and 2nd para?
From different websites I looked at 800 words seemed like a max..

Since you did a topic of choice ques, can I ask you something?
I am also doing a topic of choice, what do you think about starting with a quote from a book and then writing an essay?