Mists
Jan 10, 2010
Undergraduate / Georgia tech - what would you hope to learn and contribute to community? [4]
"One of the leading research institutions in the world , there will be numerous opportunities at Georgia Tech for me to research about electric cars, even to the master's level which I plan to pursue. "
Make it independent. (e.g. Since it is one of the .. etc)
"I have shared my opinions on education, marijuana , and social policies and more issued with my friends."
IMO: I would leave out weed and use another topic.
"I always think about how to explain the materials that are hard to understand easily, such as using analogies, instead of using strict and textbook-like language, which can be confusing ."
Excess, not needed, usually when you say about making something easier it is already difficult. Its hard to explain, but that last part is unnecessary.
"People would go back to riding horses for their transportation and it would take decades to reach their destination. "
Consider revising? You don't seriously think that people would start using horses again? It would show a sense of narrow-mindedness.
I'm currently working on writing the same essay for Georgia Tech, deadlines Friday. So I have to hurry..! I actually had the essay from the first prompt - Please expand upon an aspect (s) of your academic or extra-curricular background that you feel is especially important to you and that will help us to get to know you as a person. But one of my teachers convinced me to write the second one.
"One of the leading research institutions in the world , there will be numerous opportunities at Georgia Tech for me to research about electric cars, even to the master's level which I plan to pursue. "
Make it independent. (e.g. Since it is one of the .. etc)
"I have shared my opinions on education, marijuana , and social policies and more issued with my friends."
IMO: I would leave out weed and use another topic.
"I always think about how to explain the materials that are hard to understand easily, such as using analogies, instead of using strict and textbook-like language, which can be confusing ."
Excess, not needed, usually when you say about making something easier it is already difficult. Its hard to explain, but that last part is unnecessary.
"People would go back to riding horses for their transportation and it would take decades to reach their destination. "
Consider revising? You don't seriously think that people would start using horses again? It would show a sense of narrow-mindedness.
I'm currently working on writing the same essay for Georgia Tech, deadlines Friday. So I have to hurry..! I actually had the essay from the first prompt - Please expand upon an aspect (s) of your academic or extra-curricular background that you feel is especially important to you and that will help us to get to know you as a person. But one of my teachers convinced me to write the second one.