Scholarship / My eassay for master in inter trade law&finance. Is it good enough to apply for scholarship? [7]

Hi,
If you were the admission committee,will you accept me?Is it good enough to apply for scholarship?.Please help comment,Thank you in advance!!!

The increasing in strategic partnership, free trade agreement as well as bilateral/multilateral co-operation between countries in the last few years has highlighted the important of internationalization. And Thailand is no exception, it is this challenging environment to which I intend to get to know more about global issues. Thus, my goal is not only to continue my career in finance field but also to broader new scope of interest wherein I could advance analytical approaches to diverse global economic system.

To achieve my career goals, I need to learn more about international finance which I have foundation knowledge from my bachelor degree of Business Administration(Major Banking and Finance) and my 3 years working experience in xxx, one of the world most important international bank. In order to add more value of my career path in international financial institution, I desire to learn broader area of business and law is interested me since I studied Business Law I and II in sophomore year in university. I fascinating to deepening knowledge in trade law and finance so I consider applying for The xxx Program which will provide me the formative and innovative analysis of judicial and economic rationality, an in depth idea of practical approaches in high level competencies and analytical skills, and offering professional internship track enable me to develop professional expertise. Moreover, I will acquire global vision and multicultural perspective by following two academic years in three different countries.

Strong academic background in various areas in finance, familiarity with international business environment and experience gained while working in multicultural organization have given me the confidence to tackle advanced problems on a macro level. In addition, having to handle multi-task and prepare various reports in accuracy and in timely manner have helped me to develop comprehensive analytical abilities, detail oriented and able to work under pressure. I look forward to applying these abilities to the immense opportunities available at your program.

I have selected the The xxx Program because of its outstanding faculty and research facilities of each participating institution, emphasis on a collaborative learning environment, flexibility in curriculum, study abroad opportunity and a global perspective to various international trade law and finance. I hope to become a part of this dynamic culture which will give me a leading edge to work effectively in diverse teams and situations.