Arielruan
Jan 27, 2010
Writing Feedback / 'bedroom is essential' Toefl essay: The most important room in your house [4]
Hi guys, I'm newbie here and this's my first essay :P.
Please correct it and give me some opinions :D.
Thanks very much.
What room do you consider to be the most important in a house? Why is this room more important to you than any room?
There are many rooms in a house, and each of them has its own function. You can consider living room to be the most important because you're hospitable. Or, you consider kitchen to be that one because it's the place your family gathered together eating and chatting. But, in my opinion, bedroom is indispensible, for 3 following reasons.
Firstly, bedroom is the place where I can relax after all day work. Nowaday, life is getting more and more busy. That causes a new century disease called stress or tired state.You will fell unbalanced , find it difficulty in solving proplem. Sometimes, you can even nearly go mad , lose your mind. So that, a peaceful place, a warm room, a comfortable bed seems to be ideal to make you less tired.
Secondly, you can't call somewhere your house if it's not where you sleep everynight. You can go out for eat so it is able to not have a kitchen. You can suggest your friends, your guest meeting in a cafeteria, a restaurant so it is able to not have a living room. But you can't sleep outside or other's house. So that, a house can't lack a bedroom.
Finally, bedroom is your private space. You can show your personality. You decorate the room the way you want. Bedroom can say something about your character, your liking, your age... If you're romantic one, your room can be painted pink, some pictures on the wall and even there's some flowers. If you like scientics, there might be a book shelve, a computer, a terrestrial globe.. If you like music, you could stick some pictures of some music bands on the wall. There might be a radio, some music instrumental.
In conclusion, bedroom is essential because it is where you relax, where you express your character. I always take good care of my bedroom because I consider it the most important room in my house.
Hi guys, I'm newbie here and this's my first essay :P.
Please correct it and give me some opinions :D.
Thanks very much.
What room do you consider to be the most important in a house? Why is this room more important to you than any room?
There are many rooms in a house, and each of them has its own function. You can consider living room to be the most important because you're hospitable. Or, you consider kitchen to be that one because it's the place your family gathered together eating and chatting. But, in my opinion, bedroom is indispensible, for 3 following reasons.
Firstly, bedroom is the place where I can relax after all day work. Nowaday, life is getting more and more busy. That causes a new century disease called stress or tired state.You will fell unbalanced , find it difficulty in solving proplem. Sometimes, you can even nearly go mad , lose your mind. So that, a peaceful place, a warm room, a comfortable bed seems to be ideal to make you less tired.
Secondly, you can't call somewhere your house if it's not where you sleep everynight. You can go out for eat so it is able to not have a kitchen. You can suggest your friends, your guest meeting in a cafeteria, a restaurant so it is able to not have a living room. But you can't sleep outside or other's house. So that, a house can't lack a bedroom.
Finally, bedroom is your private space. You can show your personality. You decorate the room the way you want. Bedroom can say something about your character, your liking, your age... If you're romantic one, your room can be painted pink, some pictures on the wall and even there's some flowers. If you like scientics, there might be a book shelve, a computer, a terrestrial globe.. If you like music, you could stick some pictures of some music bands on the wall. There might be a radio, some music instrumental.
In conclusion, bedroom is essential because it is where you relax, where you express your character. I always take good care of my bedroom because I consider it the most important room in my house.
