Undergraduate / Life is a climb, but the view is great - University of Texas [4]

I would suggest that you refer to the school as the "University of Texas" throughout your essay. If you don't know the correct name of the school you are applying to, you may not get very far in the application process. I am well acquainted with how important The University, a justifiably proud institution, feels its name is. Your essay also has a number of grammatical, punctuation and construction mistakes, and I suggest that you have someone help you edit for these. In places your language is a bit stilted, and I suggest you think about using less abstract terms and more personal heartfelt words to describe your goals and dreams. Try to inject some of your own humanity into your writing. Good luck, Taylor.