Graduate / "Why did you choose the health profession", short response from my post-bacc app [6]

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Why did you choose the health profession indicated in your application?
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Medicine is a unique profession in the sense that the practitioner can be a research scientist, an artist, and a humanitarian. In the same way, I have tried to lead a balanced life among the three fields. My interest for science is fueled by the experimental process; the practice of successfully marrying a theoretical concept with real, tangible data to support, or refute it. Leading a team of four, my current research has focused on the design and synthesis of self-assembled cyclic peptide into ordered nanostructure as a drug delivery system that can be used for improving cellular uptake of water-insoluble drugs. I hope this work will make significant contributions to the field of medicine and will be of interest to the pharmaceutical industry. I expect to continue to do scientific research after graduating University of Rhode Island.

In addition to my interest in the science of medicine, my passion for art also plays a vital role in my journey to become a physician. Growing up, art has become an indispensable aspect of my life. Throughout my academic career, I have taken numerous art courses and won a number of art awards, including the Congressional Art Competition. As I mature as a student and as a human being, I know that art will continue to play an important part in my medical advancement. Not only does art utilize physical technique, it also requires mental cognition -- both of which I believe a physician must be able to draw upon in their daily life.

Other than my artistic talent, I also feel the need to serve the less fortunate. Volunteering at the Rhode Island Free Clinic, I was completely immersed in the underserved population. Many families at the clinic are overly grateful for the opportunity to see a doctor, even waiting for hours, in hope, to have their names called. Serving at RIFC has confirmed that medicine is truly where I belong. Even in my limited capability as a volunteer, putting a reassuring hand on a patient and seeing the smile on her face is deeply rewarding. Knowing that, even for a moment, she is thinking about something besides her sick body, keeps me coming back every week.

Medicine, to me, is the most rewarding occupation. It provides challenges, as well as opportunities for me to give back and help my fellow human beings.