Undergraduate / "more about you in your own words" - Georgetown University Essay [8]

The Admissions Committee would like to know more about you in your own words. Please submit a brief essay, either autobiographical or creative, which you feel best describes you. If transferring from a four-year institution, please include your reasons for transferring from your present institution.

This is my first draft for my application essay. Every comment is welcomed :). I haven't put my reasons to transfer though, cause I don't find the way to link them to the rest of the essay :S. Any ideas?

Who I'm I? I spend endless nights thinking on possible answers, but never found one that fully described me. But one night I found a blue box in my room, and decided to open it. This seemed to be a magical box, which contained all my life in it since I was child. That was when I understood that I was finally going answer that question that persisted on my mind.

The first thing I found where my childhood photos. My Baptism, my first birthday, family trips, all these moments that we usually forget through time but yet gave us so much happiness and in some way form our personality and character. I found my medals from the basketball championships. Then I found photos and letters from my childhood friends, the people with whom I played and enjoyed one of the happiest stages of my life, a time free of worries, were no one cared about getting fat after eating a bunch of candies, or getting dirty after playing for hours. A time in which we are very curious and like to explore the world. Then I found my report card with good grades and teachers' comments as "She is a very responsible kid". After seeing these I thought... "I haven't changed at all".

Then I found my teenage years. The first thing I saw was a letter from my mom, the person who has been always by my side, my mentor. In it she told me how much she loved me and how important I was for her. At this point I started crying, it was a very emotional moment. I also found photos from the parties I went with my best friends, with whom I spent most of my time, chatting, reading magazines, going to the movies. I kept searching and found report cards, photos when I was elected president of the Student Government, diplomas from Debate Championships, and photos when we were champions. Moments in which I felt very proud of myself. I also found the letters that the patients with whom I did community service wrote me, which are treasures for me since they remind me of how I positively influenced the life of this people, and they did to mine, too.

That was how among letters, pictures, medals and diplomas I found out who I am. I'm the people I know and that have influenced my life. I'm the mistakes I've made and have made me grow as a person. I'm still that curious child who likes to investigate everything, and googles everything. I'm a person who has enjoyed life, and has been blessed with the best friends and a marvelous family. I'm a perseverant person who works hard in order to achieve all of her goals. I'm a person who takes action in order to make her dreams come true. I'm a passionate person, who strives for perfection. I'm a leader, a person who enjoys and has been in a position in which she can positively influence others. I'm a person who likes to contribute to the community and share time with people that are somehow forgotten by the society. I'm an idealist, a person who believes that the human being can give all of its potential in order to change the world. I'm a dreamer who is determined to achieve all of her goals.