marcee34
Feb 8, 2010
Undergraduate / "An entrepreneur at heart" - economics, reasons for transferring, objectives [8]
yes it does, thanks guys, i appreciate your input.
yes it does, thanks guys, i appreciate your input.
marcee34
Feb 7, 2010
Undergraduate / "An entrepreneur at heart" - economics, reasons for transferring, objectives [8]
i would love ideas on how to improve this essay
i would love ideas on how to improve this essay
marcee34
Feb 7, 2010
Undergraduate / "education" is little more than an expensive isolation - essays for Stanford. [5]
I love the detailed explanation of the first paragraph. It's a good eye catcher for the reader and it keeps them interested, however, you might want to cut out the redundant words in your essay. good luck on your admission to stanford.
I love the detailed explanation of the first paragraph. It's a good eye catcher for the reader and it keeps them interested, however, you might want to cut out the redundant words in your essay. good luck on your admission to stanford.
marcee34
Feb 7, 2010
Undergraduate / "more about you in your own words" - Georgetown University Essay [8]
one of the reasons you might want to transfer to another college should be first and foremost academic. Emphasize on the strong department or program the school you want to transfer to has to offer. then other secondary factors like spiritual or social influences of the area, is another reason you might want to transfer.
one of the reasons you might want to transfer to another college should be first and foremost academic. Emphasize on the strong department or program the school you want to transfer to has to offer. then other secondary factors like spiritual or social influences of the area, is another reason you might want to transfer.
marcee34
Feb 7, 2010
Undergraduate / "An entrepreneur at heart" - economics, reasons for transferring, objectives [8]
I left the vibrant city of Lagos, August 2008 to embark on a new journey of my life as a college student. After a year at Penn State University, I was totally convinced that economics was the right career path for me. Being an entrepreneur at heart, I enjoyed the environment of discussing business especially when it interacted with law.
As my passion for business and economics grew, I discovered that while Penn State offered me a great lead way into my initial studies in economics, it didn't offer me the many resources NYU has. The first semester of my sophomore year, I was later informed that the Smeal College of business would be discontinuing its economics program after my year.
I decided that it was time for me to broaden my academic arena and I was not going to be second fiddle by settling and passing by for the rest of my college life. By attending the New York University, I hope to broaden and deepen my knowledge of economics, participate in more lucrative work experiences, get involved in more volunteer work and eventually go on to having a joint JD/MBA degree.
NYU stands out for me because the economics program at the Stern School of Business perfectly matches my academic interests and professional goals, I have the opportunity to be immersed into a dynamic business-oriented community, but at the same time still having that wonderful college experience. At New York University, I will also gain personal and business value by attending the weekly seminars and forums offered by the economics department.
Even though, I have made many good friends at Penn State, and have had great discussions with some wonderful professors, NYU has a lot to offer me as an individual. Being in a more cultural and diverse city atmosphere, where I am stimulated by new ideas and can meet different people from all walks of life with different experiences and backgrounds will help develop my character as a socially conscious human being.
I'm now looking forward to pushing myself to experience new academic, social and spiritual situations that I am yet to be familiar with. I have done well at Penn State, and I am convinced I can meet the academic challenges at NYU with hard work and dedication. At the New York University, I would grow to be intellectually and culturally sound. I would be proud to be a student of such a great institution
I left the vibrant city of Lagos, August 2008 to embark on a new journey of my life as a college student. After a year at Penn State University, I was totally convinced that economics was the right career path for me. Being an entrepreneur at heart, I enjoyed the environment of discussing business especially when it interacted with law.
As my passion for business and economics grew, I discovered that while Penn State offered me a great lead way into my initial studies in economics, it didn't offer me the many resources NYU has. The first semester of my sophomore year, I was later informed that the Smeal College of business would be discontinuing its economics program after my year.
I decided that it was time for me to broaden my academic arena and I was not going to be second fiddle by settling and passing by for the rest of my college life. By attending the New York University, I hope to broaden and deepen my knowledge of economics, participate in more lucrative work experiences, get involved in more volunteer work and eventually go on to having a joint JD/MBA degree.
NYU stands out for me because the economics program at the Stern School of Business perfectly matches my academic interests and professional goals, I have the opportunity to be immersed into a dynamic business-oriented community, but at the same time still having that wonderful college experience. At New York University, I will also gain personal and business value by attending the weekly seminars and forums offered by the economics department.
Even though, I have made many good friends at Penn State, and have had great discussions with some wonderful professors, NYU has a lot to offer me as an individual. Being in a more cultural and diverse city atmosphere, where I am stimulated by new ideas and can meet different people from all walks of life with different experiences and backgrounds will help develop my character as a socially conscious human being.
I'm now looking forward to pushing myself to experience new academic, social and spiritual situations that I am yet to be familiar with. I have done well at Penn State, and I am convinced I can meet the academic challenges at NYU with hard work and dedication. At the New York University, I would grow to be intellectually and culturally sound. I would be proud to be a student of such a great institution
marcee34
Feb 7, 2010
Undergraduate / "Almost at the bottom!", Common Application Main Essay [21]
Your story really catches the attention of the reader, and it is a wonderful one, but I think it is a tad too long.
Your story really catches the attention of the reader, and it is a wonderful one, but I think it is a tad too long.