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smith2010   
Feb 11, 2010
Undergraduate / Teaching, advising, and mentoring - Smith Supplement to meet my academic goals [6]

Here is a revised versions. I tried to be more specific as to what skills I would attain. Should I take out the first sentence and talk more about Smith's Psychology Department and how it would benefit me?

Topic: What specific aspects of Smith College will better meet your academic goals?

By providing me with an open curriculum and various department resources, Smith will open the door of opportunities such as taking rigorous courses and doing in-depth research in its laboratories. I will also have discussions of important issues relevant to my intended major, Cognitive Psychology, which will equip me with the skills needed to apply in my future endeavors. With Smith's hands-on training I will attain essential writing, quantitative and communication skills that will aid me to understand and think critically about behavior and mental processes. I long to be in an environment where high quality teaching, advising, and mentoring of students is part of everyday life.

Thank you.
smith2010   
Feb 8, 2010
Undergraduate / Teaching, advising, and mentoring - Smith Supplement to meet my academic goals [6]

What specific aspects of Smith College will better meet your academic goals? 100 words!!

Smith's open curriculum will equip me with the knowledge and skills that I will need to apply to real world settings and my future endeavors. It will challenge my knowledge by providing me with the opportunities to take rigorous courses and do in-depth study, as well as have discussions of important issues relevant to my intended major, Psychology. Smith's unique ideas, that generate from diverse people from all over the world, will broaden my perspectives and help me grow as an individual. I long to be in an environment where high quality teaching, advising, and mentoring of students is part of everyday life.

What can I do to improve it? Please fix gramatical errors. I cannot have more than 100 words, and currently have 103. HELP!!!

Thanks in advance :)
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