Writing Feedback / The Hijab: Friend or foe? (argumentative essay on 2 authors essays) [7]

make your opinion clear. Make the opinion mara longer. The reader really wants to know what YOUR thoughts are. Lead the reader to it.

Scholarship / My eassay for master in inter trade law&finance. Is it good enough to apply for scholarship? [7]

I think what you should do is just sit back relax and then write it all over a again.

Dont write it on the same lines as this one. First think of arguements as to why you want to change from finance to law and THEN phrase the arguements and make it more personal with real examples. I am sure you can think of something.

At the end of essay the reader should feel like he/she knows a bit about you so make it personal. It should sound like a conversation.