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Posts by N2N
Joined: Feb 20, 2010
Last Post: Sep 20, 2010
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N2N   
Sep 20, 2010
Writing Feedback / Students' academic performance strongly reflects their teachers' teaching performance. [8]

Hi Xun.

As Mark said, you did a great job on the format. But I think the substance is not so clear yet, espcially the difference between the first and the second reason.

I think there are better ideas to use, such as: encouraging people who loves being a teacher to follow their dream (because the salary of a teacher is not high), or creating a competitive spirit among the teachers, or reducing the boring, poorly-qualified teachers...

Yes, your paragraph already comprise my first and second idea, but I think it's greater if you clarify them.

:D
N2N   
Mar 2, 2010
Scholarship / Why do you deserve this scholarship? serious attitude towards study [6]

Studying 12 hours a day during the preparation period for the entrance exam was stressingstresssful but it paid off with my admission to Foreign Language Specializing High school, one of the best schools nationwide.

I have never let myself be late for school.

However, please do not mistake me for some nerd you see sticking to a desk in a library on a beautiful Sunday, having nothing to do aside studying

Up to now, I still try to visit the kids whenever I have time to see those little friends again .
N2N   
Mar 1, 2010
Writing Feedback / Explain why you like (or do not like) to work in a team. [5]

Topic : Explain why you like (or do not like) to work in a team.

I like to work in a team for several reasons.
The biggest ones are making the work more efficient and having the team spirit.

Firstly, working in a team will make the work more efficient.
It increases the productivity of your work. If a job requires 10 days for one person to finish, then it will just be done in 5 days if 3 people work together.

Not only increasing the productivy, it also upgrade the quality of the work. Because when we work together, we can see each other's mistakes and we can fix them perfectly. Everybody makes mistakes, but it's good to have someone fixing the mistakes we don't even realize. Personally, it will improve your ability.

Secondly, working in a team will give us the team spirit.
Working in a team requires us to unite and care for each other. If we don't connect with our team-mates, the work will be a mess!

When having team spirit, you will know how to behave to people. It will help you to fall in line with society. Then you will have people's love and trust - the key of life and success.

Although there are some disadvantages of working in a team, we should tend to be together. Working together will make you feel life is more pleasant and make yourself much more grown up.

"A dream you dream alone is only a dream. A dream you dream together is reality." (John Lennon)

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Help me, I worry about my writing skill :-s
N2N   
Feb 28, 2010
Undergraduate / advice I've gotten from "Hero" by Mariah Carey [3]

Well, this is my trial. I'm fifteen and I'm from Vietnam. I'm going to take an exam for the Singapore scholarship next week but it has been a long time I haven't written essays. I hope you can help me.

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I am a crazy music fan. I've usually found lessons from the songs. And the best advice I've gotten is from "Hero" by Mariah Carey. It tells me not to give up and believe in myself. Whenever I face an overwhelming challenge, I think about it and have more strength. It has helped me through a lot of problems, and now I will tell you the most memorial one.

Last year, my English teacher told us to do a report about recycling, reusing and reduction. It was so interesting, I'd always liked reporting and the topic was so fresh. However, I worried about it, too.

The reason I worried was my group-mates. My group is a biggest group in class with 15 people. However, nine of them are average - weak students. And the good ones are too busy with the extra classes. It's terrible to do a groupwork without co-operation.

I still believed that it was okay. Then I did a lot of work that was supposed to be done by my group-mates. I wrote the play, I made the Power Point of the report, I also took a part in the play... I'd done a lot of things and I just wanted the report to have good receipts.

But it still was a group's exercise. My teacher wanted the weak students to take part in reporting. It was such an disaster. The report was such a long one. I couldn't imagine that the weak students could take it. "What should I do while the bad ones overwhelm the good ones?", I started thinking I should give up.

I was really fed up with the report. I felt like I just wanted to runaway and forget everything. I wondered why God could be so cruel to me.

Occassionally, I heard Mariah Carey "Hold on, there will be tomorrow. In time, you'll find the way...". There was something growing inside me, I tried to figure to way to solve my problem. Then an idea came: dividing my group into three small groups. Each group has 2 good students and me, and 3 weak students. The weak ones's mission are introduction and saying goodbye, it won't take too long.

Finally, the report day had come. I was amazed by my group. They did such a great job. Although there were some mistakes, I'd had a feeling that my group would be the best. Yes, my group was the best with the score 94/100. My friends were yelling for happiness. And I just simply took a long breath "I deserve this".

"Many of life's failures are people who did not realize how close they were to success when they gave up" (Thomas Edison)

Well, it was my happy ending. And that advice will always remain in my mind.
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