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qchen

Feb 21, 2010

Undergraduate / Why Rice, excellent pre-med program (Transfer Essay) [12]

Simrath: sicne im going to be covering how i've changed from two years ago and such in my main common app essay, i'm prob just going to leave this one the way it is. im working on a stronger intro now. thanks alot for the help!

Janson: the word limit is 200 so its hard to be too specific with everything i want to cover. i've got rid of the part where i talked about my lack of confidence. This is what i put instead to avoid sounding too negative. (see post #6)) let me know if you think this works. thanks for the input!

Two years ago, unsure of my future plans and my ability to succeed at a world-renowned institution, I withdrew my application to Rice. Today, with a much better understanding of my goals and abilities, Rice is no more the placed filled with uncertainties that I feared. Instead, I see challenges, opportunities, and a clear path to success that lies ahead at Rice.

qchen

Feb 21, 2010

Undergraduate / Why Rice, excellent pre-med program (Transfer Essay) [12]

thanks so much simrath!!! You made a lot of great points. I edited it to the best i can but theres only so much i could add/change due to the word limit. right now its 216 words. i wonder if 16 words over the limit is going to be a big problem. anyways let me know if its any better/worse!!! thanks!!

Since I affirmed my decision to become a doctor, Rice had been my top choice. Its excellent pre-med program will not only challenge me to reach my potential, but also adequately prepare me for medical school. I hope to take advantage of Rice's close proximity to Texas Medical Center, and various opportunities to gain clinical experiences in some of the best medical facilities in the world. Also, Rice's wide range of innovative classes will allow me to purse my interest outside science. I cannot wait to take classes such as Medical Sociology and Britain from the Industrial Revolution to Gordon Brown.

Having attended school in three countries, I cannot imagine the boredom of a homogeneous institution. I need an intellectually stimulating environment where diversity is truly embraced, rather than merely discussed. Rice is a perfect match. With its unique residential college system, Rice would provide a fulfilling college experience and smooth my transition.

Two years ago, unsure of my future plans and my ability to succeed at a world-renowned institution, I withdrew my application to Rice. Today, with a much better understanding of my goals and abilities, Rice is no more the placed filled with uncertainties that I feared. Instead, I see challenges, opportunities, and a clear path to success that lies ahead at Rice.

qchen

Feb 20, 2010

Undergraduate / Why Rice, excellent pre-med program (Transfer Essay) [12]

okay thanks so much for the feedback!

qchen

Feb 20, 2010

Undergraduate / Why Rice, excellent pre-med program (Transfer Essay) [12]

Word Count 232. Suggestions on how to cut down some words? Any input would be appreciated!

What motivated you to transfer to Rice University? Please be specific and limit your response to 200 words.

I'm drawn to Rice particular by its excellent pre-med program. It will not only challenge me to reach my potential, but also adequately prepare me for medical school. I will be able to take advantage of Rice's close proximity to Texas Medical Center, and various opportunities to gain clinical experiences in some of the best medical facilities in the world. I also will be able to learn to use my knowledge to resolve real world problems through the abundant research opportunities. Furthermore, a wide range of innovative classes offered would allow me to purse my interest outside science. I cannot wait to take classes such as Medical Sociology and Britain from the Industrial Revolution to Gordon Brown. Having grown up in a big city and lived in three countries, I also find the diverse student body and location of Rice extremely appealing. And the unique residential college system would most certainly enrich my college experience and smooth my transition to Rice.

Two years ago, my application to Rice ended with my lack of confidence and motivation. I had already been accepted into the school that I now attend, and I feared failure and doubted whether I would be successful at a world-renowned institution such as Rice. Today, with a much better understanding of my future goals and myself, I have come to realize Rice is the perfect place to fulfill my dreams.