Ariel
Mar 5, 2010
Writing Feedback / the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activty. [2]
People believe that the earth is being harmed by human activity. According to me
me "Earth is better place to live, however it is being ruined by human activity".l ike
deforestation, pollution in water , atmosphere and earth surface.
Firstly, I acceptasthe truth that earth is getting worsen day by day because of human activity. Such as, Man is cutting many trees for he`shis needs. Cutting wood for making furniture's, house and fire work. Due to which ecology is getting disturbed. As more and more deforestation is done m ore solar energy is not converted and the utilization of solar energy is being decreased.
Secondly, due more industrialization many chemicals in gaseous state are let into the atmosphere which leads to air pollution.Vehicles which burn petrol and diesel expel out carbon dioxide in atmosphere. These also contribute to the damage of ecological balance.
Finally, farmers use fertilizer in the farm for proper growth of plant also ruined the earth surface. As it increases chemical level which leads to decrease its fertility of the soil. Also, people make the rivers dirty by disposal of sewage matter into it. Hence the purity of water decreases.
To sum up, the earth is better place to live however it is being continuously ruined by the human activity.We should take measures to stay earth a better place.
In the thesis statement, you say earth is better place but ruined by human activity. I don't get it. Which side do you support? If both, then I don't see the "better place" part in your body. I think you should state a clearer opinion, which in this case is "human activities ruin the earth". Hope this helps ^^
People believe that the earth is being harmed by human activity. According to me
me "Earth is better place to live, however it is being ruined by human activity"
deforestation, pollution in water , atmosphere and earth surface.
Firstly, I accept
Secondly, due more industrialization many chemicals in gaseous state are let into the atmosphere which leads to air pollution.Vehicles which burn petrol and diesel expel out carbon dioxide in atmosphere. These also contribute to the damage of ecological balance.
Finally, farmers use fertilizer in the farm for proper growth of plant also ruined the earth surface. As it increases chemical level which leads to decrease its fertility of the soil. Also, people make the rivers dirty by disposal of sewage matter into it. Hence the purity of water decreases.
To sum up, the earth is better place to live however it is being continuously ruined by the human activity.We should take measures to stay earth a better place.
In the thesis statement, you say earth is better place but ruined by human activity. I don't get it. Which side do you support? If both, then I don't see the "better place" part in your body. I think you should state a clearer opinion, which in this case is "human activities ruin the earth". Hope this helps ^^
