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jegues

Mar 15, 2010

Essays / Thesis Statement Critique/Review - Anthropology (Introduction of the plough) [6]

What does that even mean!? It's okay for someone, like me, to recognize that he has a poor sense of direction, for example, but with writing, how can you say your skills are not good? We come up with words differently on different days. Also, our writing seems different to different people on different days.

Well said Kevin. It's just that my personal experience with essays, and any writing in particular has always been something I've struggled with.

I visited with my professor again today, and I'm going to keep this as a preliminary thesis statement for now and rework it as I continue to the develop the body of my essay.

Perhaps I'll update this thread with the updated version in due time.

Thanks again!

jegues

Mar 15, 2010

Essays / Thesis Statement Critique/Review - Anthropology (Introduction of the plough) [6]

The whole thing out there was intended to be my thesis statement.

jegues

Mar 14, 2010

Essays / Thesis Statement Critique/Review - Anthropology (Introduction of the plough) [6]

Hello all,

Let me start off by letting you guys know that my writing skills aren't very good to begin with. Just a fact I've come to recognize with time.

Here's a thesis statement I wrote for an anthropology essay I'm starting, you are suppose to choose a human adaptive strategy and discuss its relevant dimensions as well as its advantages/disadvantages.

Let me know what you think:

"One of the most meaningful and recognized adaptive strategies in the transition from horticulture to intensive agriculture is the introduction of plough technology among humans. The introduction of the plough allowed for a number of distinguishing changes across numerous dimensions. Technological, political, ecological, social and biological advantages and disadvantages began to appear, showing us how truly revolutionary the introduction of plough technology affected human society across the globe."

It's a start hopefully, very open to criticism/restructering it. I'm here to learn!

Thanks again!