hissunshine
Mar 31, 2010
Essays / European Women History - Thesis needed [2]
Hi! I need help with my history essay. I have to compare two societies or one society at different time periods in European Women's History.
Teacher said - "Your paper should be based on two primary sources. You discuss each one and put it in its historical context, explaining why the women were upset. What they wanted, What they were doing. What was going on at the time.
Then at the end, you conclude by stating what had changed or NOT between the writing of each and whether the situations in the two countries were that different. If they were different, how do you explain it. It the situations were the same, what does that tell you!"
Every thesis I give to her she says is to descriptive. The one below is also to long.
Thesis: This paper has two main primary sources: The Napoleonic Code and Harriet Taylors essay, "On Marriage." The Napoleonic Code is a prime example of how woman were viewed at the time of the French Revolution, and the type of deterrents women faced while trying to progress. Harriet Taylor was a feminist Unitarian of the Victorian Age and fought for civil marriage, women's suffrage, education, employment opportunities, and the right to divorce. Her essay, "On Marriage" gives readers an idea of the thoughts, desires, and needs that the common Victorian woman once had. An in depth analysis of each primary sources helps paint a picture of women's struggles, hopes, actions, and needs during the French Revolution and Victorian Age.
What she had to say:
"Your thesis is more descriptive. It has no argument. You are just describing what the respective essays are about. You have to come up with an argument about how the primary sources reveal constant concerns of women despite the different time periods. Or explain how the concerns are different because of the progress women have made or because of the repressive atitutdes of the various times."
Does anyone have any good ideas for a argumentative thesis?!!
YOU WOULD MAKE MY LIFE IF YOU HELPED ME!!!
Hi! I need help with my history essay. I have to compare two societies or one society at different time periods in European Women's History.
Teacher said - "Your paper should be based on two primary sources. You discuss each one and put it in its historical context, explaining why the women were upset. What they wanted, What they were doing. What was going on at the time.
Then at the end, you conclude by stating what had changed or NOT between the writing of each and whether the situations in the two countries were that different. If they were different, how do you explain it. It the situations were the same, what does that tell you!"
Every thesis I give to her she says is to descriptive. The one below is also to long.
Thesis: This paper has two main primary sources: The Napoleonic Code and Harriet Taylors essay, "On Marriage." The Napoleonic Code is a prime example of how woman were viewed at the time of the French Revolution, and the type of deterrents women faced while trying to progress. Harriet Taylor was a feminist Unitarian of the Victorian Age and fought for civil marriage, women's suffrage, education, employment opportunities, and the right to divorce. Her essay, "On Marriage" gives readers an idea of the thoughts, desires, and needs that the common Victorian woman once had. An in depth analysis of each primary sources helps paint a picture of women's struggles, hopes, actions, and needs during the French Revolution and Victorian Age.
What she had to say:
"Your thesis is more descriptive. It has no argument. You are just describing what the respective essays are about. You have to come up with an argument about how the primary sources reveal constant concerns of women despite the different time periods. Or explain how the concerns are different because of the progress women have made or because of the repressive atitutdes of the various times."
Does anyone have any good ideas for a argumentative thesis?!!
YOU WOULD MAKE MY LIFE IF YOU HELPED ME!!!
