Undergraduate / About me in 10 years... | Temple University Transfer | Admission Essay [4]

Please type an essay of 2000 characters (approximately 300 words) that tells us more about you. Imagine you have graduated from Temple University. You are preparing to attend your 10-year reunion, and the alumni office has asked you to write a one-page essay about your personal and professional accomplishments since graduation. What would yours say?

Ten years have passed since my graduation from Temple University, where I have successfully achieved my goal of obtaining a Bachelor's Degree in Biochemistry. I am tremendously proud in the academic progress that I have attributed over the years and without any doubt felt that my decision to continue my studies at Temple's Graduate Studies , and furthering the knowledge and experience in the field, was one of my best decisions. Upon obtaining my PhD I felt my knowledge in the field of Biochemistry has been strengthen to its highest peak and I was left confident in that Temple has provided me the most respectable education. Since my graduation I have managed to form friendships with numerous interesting and brilliant people. From the highly respectable professors to the diverse and interesting students, I felt that I was obtaining from Temple University more than education but an experience which has changed my life forever. I was very proud with my continued relationship with Temple's Phi Beta Kappa chapter, where I have acquired many acquaintances and life-long friendships with other respectable students of Temple University, and by association was able to further discover its diverse memberships through its many chapters across the country. I am really proud that by obtaining my education at Temple University that it has helped me to become a better person, both academically and most importantly mentally. Having acquired both of my degrees from Temple, and given my time towards the many internship and research connection it had offered, I has honored with me with the admission to Philadelphia's GlaxoSmithKline division of research and development. Upon my application I was proud to admit that I was a Temple University graduate and knew that with its respectable position in the science field that I would be applying with having acquired a great deal of knowledge and that I would be an worthy candidate for their workplace. Since then I have used the knowledge I have acquired from Temple University and have been effectively putting all my efforts towards the well-being of future generations.

Still working out what else to add, hence the rather short length right now, and also whether specifying the pharmaceutical company's name is a good idea. Not sure if name dropping a brand like Glaxon is something I should do in an essay that is focused on Temple University. Comments and suggestions will be much appreciated!