Writing Feedback / Questioning authority is important for improvements and innovations in many fields. [NEW]

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Topic "Question Authority. Only by questioning accepted wisdom can we advance our understanding of the world"

improving through questioning

To improve wisdom and better understanding of the world questioning authority plays an important role. Question authority is the authority which can
maintain a check and balance of a system and improves the previous knowledge. Every theory is questioned , then improved and formulate into law
which provides a better understanding of facts.

The chief reason of this view is , our history had proved that improvements are made in every field by questioning. For example, It was supposed for a long time that our earth is formed on its own , but by questioning this concept Darwin presented a new theory of earth formation and gives a knowledge of

different phases of Earth's formation. This led to improve our understanding of Earth formation.

Similarly, inventing many physical laws in different time durations, by various scientists provides better reasoning of scientific myths. For example, it was
believed that earth is the center of solar system, but Nicolai presented a new theory that it is not the earth that is center of our solar system. Sun is actually

the center of solar system. This concept provides a revolutionized knowledge in the field of astronomy. This concept led into the better understanding of our solar system and revealed reasons of day and night , changing of seasons.

Weather forecast is another important feature of this. And all this new knowledge is because of questioning the previous concepts.

Furthermore, in our democratic system questioning authority plays a key role in check and balance and maintaining good governance in country. Our previous rulers were mostly lazy kings and dictators who rules tyrannically. In these times no one has an authority to question government decisions. And this results a poor anarchy in the system. But now as there is a questioning authority, any bogus decision can be challenged. This results of a much

stabilized and better controlling system.

Though questioning authority sometimes causes hindrance in law and order situation but it's benefits are much more and can overcome it's drawbacks.
Hence, it can be concluded that a questioning authority is important for improvements and innovations in many fields.

Writing Feedback / Difficulties faced today are greater than yesterday - GRE Essay Preparation [NEW]

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Topic:
Young people frequently fall into the trap of assuming that the difficulties they face today are greater and more troublesome than those faced by previous generations. As they gain experience and maturity, however, they eventually become aware of falsity of this assumption:

The author of this argument is trying to explain the different phases of our life from young age to maturity. The claim is quite reasonable as many youngsters think that they are facing much tougher time than their previous did. The reason of this immature assumption is the lack of experience. Sooner, when youngsters turn into a mature level they realize that, they are living in a much better world as they have enormous facilities like fast and comfortable travelling, better health conditions, good education, improved living environment, great comforts of electronic appliances etc.

In young age many of us think that we are facing a tough time than our previous did, because we have to live in a congested environment, polluted atmosphere, competitive and fast life style and less time for extra curricular activities and family. As a young child we have a burden of tough education and have to be independent in teenage. Out door sports are limited to computer games and indoor activities because of less time and playgrounds.

But sooner one can realize that we have much better conditions than our old generations. We have better transportation, good health cares, easy ways of communication and luxurious living style because of several home appliances. We are connected to the world through fast media and internet.

The basic reasons for this change of thinking is that after experiences of life and a better education we are able to realize that we have many facilities that our previous ones haven't. We have to do less physical efforts as a lot of work is done by machines. Thanks to automation, our much of work is done on its own. Heavy machinery led into the development of huge mega structures and fast ways of transportation. Today, we have better medical facilities and have less dangers of getting infected by fatal diseases. Our communication is very fast now and we can communicate in any part of the world in seconds. Computer era has played a huge role in making our life comfortable. We can control our devices; do accurate jobs, complex calculations, and many more.

Hence, there is no doubt that today we are enjoying the blessings of science and are in a much better and safer world. Our early age false assumptions can be minimized by better understanding of life in young age. Education, here, can play a key role. We should also try to reduce the burden on young generation, so our youngsters can enjoy their childhood in today's modern world.