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N2F5

Jun 16, 2010

Writing Feedback / TOEFL:I strongly agree that government should improve public transportation [3]

Dear shih-han Hsin,

Thanks for sharing your essay with us. It was interesting to read it.

After I had read the title, I thought that I would prefer 1st statement and when saw from first sentences that you are going to write supporting the second statement it became more interesting for me.

I thought that if the essay will be able to change my mind then it is good one. Hereby, I would like to mention that it could not change my viewpoint totally, there were some points that I liked and some gaps as well as. You have shown some expressions, simple but traditional factors that still active today and example from yourself that I liked and were well suited the essay.

What I would advice you to work on is the structure of the writing. You should enlarge and enrich the paragraphs. Introduction and conclusion are too short. Conclusion in one sentence, I think, is not right. In comparence with other paragraphs your first support paragraph should be bigger as it is the main one.

I did not see a special paragraph of contrary ideas. It should come before conclusion and points that you can think about the topic critically as well.

Additionally, there were some word and expressions that you have repeted for several times. For instance, money and time, people, public transportation and the like. I t would be better to paraphrase them. Thus, the text seems to be more colorful and indicates that the author has rich vocabulary opportunities.

Wish you great success in the followings. I do believe you can do really good job.
My best regards,
N2F5

N2F5

Jun 14, 2010

Undergraduate / What are the characteristics of a good leader? (Trying to be a psychologist) [3]

Thanks Kevin for your comments. I do hope that they will assist me in my next writings.

N2F5

Jun 13, 2010

Undergraduate / What are the characteristics of a good leader? (Trying to be a psychologist) [3]

Dear all,

Please, have a look at my essay. I would be appreciated if you had checked the essay and wrote your comments about it.
Thank you in advance.

The best and the easiest way of analyzing characteristics of a good leader is just to work on an example of your boss in office, teacher at school and university and/or parents at home. Though all the mentioned positions differ from one-another they are combined under the leadership responsibilities. Thus, it would be satisfactory to analyze them and find some patterns that might lead character of a man to be the best. Basing on these three different leader positions, I would like to emphasize some crucial features, being knowledge and experience, respect and psychology.

How can a man perform a task at his best if he does not know ins and outs of it? Therefore, a leader is appraised because of the knowledge and practice that he has in his work. Hence, a man can never perform well if the work does not ring him a bell. Having no information brings to poor management, group destruction, non-desired and qualitative output and the like. There is a good saying related to this issue; "Good teachers have good students" or "Like father like son". Accordingly if you are good leader, then you have good worker team and consequently good product at the end. Otherwise, like a bad master always quarrelling with his tool the leader will be blamed and/or blame others. A leader with rich knowledge and experience and great intend to find more is always estimated, as none of us would prefer to work with stupid chief who does not know how to how to work, which method to apply, how benefit from previous experience.

Consequently, a good leader must be respectful and respected by others. Watching over his manners he must avoid misunderstanding, classification, cultural difference problems among his employees and treating them individually. Thus, great percentage of HR statistics objected to evaluate relationship within staff shows that leaders who are in close relations with the every employee are respected and successful in their position. It always brings the team into friendly and family atmosphere rather than working environment.

Trying to be a psychologist and attempting to learn and comprehend workers psychology is also one of the god characteristic features of a good leader. The man should not dictate his own ideas and behavior as a sample being a leader, but to be open to others' psychology as well. having or creating combined psychology between leader and employees is one of the essential patterns of above mentioned family atmosphere in a workplace.

To sum up the characterization, were I a leader, I would try not to make the mistakes that my advisors had done that affected my thoughts and respect about them. Furthermore, I would develop and share respect, knowledge, behavior, management skills that I have learned from my favorite teachers and chiefs which made me to love them.